Butterfly Wings

 

 

a life within me

but never born

she is golden sunlight

dancing on a daisy

she is butterfly wings

gracing her mother's garden

I never saw her face

nor held her in my arms

but I dream her smiles

and hear her laughter

between wakeful moments

on moonlit nights

when a part of me

still feels her deep within

and forgets the emptiness

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Please don't think that I say this lightly or in jest; but this is, hands down, the absolute best poem that I have EVER read regarding a mother's feelings toward her miscarried child. Each word, each line glimmered like the sun bursting forth on a rainy day. You captured the sadness; but overwhelmingly, you captured the love that, captured for a moment, can outshine a thousand lifetimes of sadness.

I don't doubt for a moment that this really happened to you, as the words are from your heart. I can feel the heartbeat and the pulse of life within.

A dear friend of mine just suffered the same loss. I am so sorry for yours, but I have so say that she left such a memorable touch on your heart that it gave life to a beautiful, beautiful poem.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you from the bottom of my heart for your very gracious review, Linda. I appreciate your words more than I can say.

[Pete A...]

Yes I agree Linda ,quite the Write ...thinking it one o the nicest reads ive had ever had the pleasure of readin ...

[Clara]

Bittersweet and loving.
You were so tender with your thoughts and careful selection of every word.
I can relate to the emptiness...

Sending much love to you. Xx

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you so much for your lovely comment, Lola. I appreciate it very much.

[Clara]

You're welcome. I'm very happy to have found you on WritersCafe, you're brilliant! :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Not really, Lola, but I thank you for the thought. I very much like your poetry, too.

[Clara]

Yes, really! Thank you, I look forward to reading more of your work. :)

[wordwarrior]

Oh Joyce this is so sad and so very touching. The manner in which you have dealt with this is amazing. For all those who have miscarried or lost a child very early in life, this is a must read.
You weave your words so delicately and with such style and elegance.
Love this!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Your comments are amazing and I feel honored. Thank you so very much, you have touched with your words and I very much appreciate you.

[Keith]

This is a touching piece Joyce, one from the heart.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Keith. I appreciate your leaving such nice thoughts behind.

[Baby Ricochet]

Wow. This is a really beautiful poem. Kind of bittersweet. Thank you for writing this Joyce. It really did move me

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks, Baby. Is that your name or just a pen name?

[Baby Ricochet]

My name's Mark

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thanks for letting me know, Mark.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

It's impossible to not be touched by the tenderness within and between the lines. I listened to a sermon many years ago likening death to a butterfly emerging from a cocoon to a bright sunny day. I never forgot how comforting those words were as many listening pondered the other side.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Such a lovely analogy, Sharon. I will think of it often. Thanks for leaving such a wonderful comment behind. I hope to read more of your poetry soon - I'm still working so my time is limited but I remember your poems as being fantastic. You have a very special gift. I always enjoyed your humorous poetry the most!

[Jack...]

Joyce, this was beautiful. So sad in a way and I imagine what this piece may be alluding to, though I know the feelings you are portraying will touch many in many different ways. Loved this.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you very much, Jack. I think your reading of my poem is close to my reading of it, but, yes, when you write a poem your give its meaning over to the reader so there is really no wrong interpretation - a large part of the beauty of poetry.

[Emerald Seas]

A very graceful writing, full of sorrow and gentleness. I feel a faith lining the words, giving hope to each thought and feeling.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you for your lovely words.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Joyce... the beauty of a life within you
is delicately penned...
"golden sunlight dancing on a daisy".
"I dream her smiles and hear her laughter..".
I was fortunate to have my son and daughter.
Butterfly Wings is a lovely way to express
the eternal rhapsody of a child. truly.. Patricia

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you for sending your beautiful thoughts along to me, Patricia. I really appreciate your reading and commenting on my poem.

[Rita L. Sev]

There is sorrow here, but you have skillfully made this a poem of hope. Touching and beautiful, Joyce.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Rita. I appreciate your leaving such nice words behind.

[PANTHER811]

Penned to perfection desires allayed without regret. Yet still burns a ember dreaming to burst into flame. With such classy style Joyce, fill the daylight with you dream.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Tom. What a lovely comment. I really appreciate hearing your thoughts.