a silver ring

a poem about lovers and a storm

 

a silver ring

around the autumn moon

it may storm

but in our bed

he reads me love poems

Author's Note

Publication Credit: Gusts 2011

Take Five Best Contemporary Tanka 2012

Reviews

[wordman]

yeah he reads you mine lol

[Joyce S. Greene]

Probably, Ron. I appreciate your reading and commenting on my poems. It means a lot to me.

[wordman]

I couldn't let that one go by

[Muse]

ahhhhh well now this is just simply precious. Makes me wish for rain so that I can crawl into bed and snuggle.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Thank you, Muse. I really appreciate your reading and commenting on my work. It means a lot to me.

[Muse]

you have me on a role, I have nearly read all of them

[Joyce S. Greene]

Wow!! I am so grateful. You have made my day.

[Keith]

Nothing like a warm bed on a cold night, you captured that beautifully in those few words. Sounds like it was very warm in your bed.

[Joyce S. Greene]

Tee hee! Yes, indeed, Keith. Tanka provides a lot of dreaming room and it sounds like you are making good use of it. Thanks for the very kind comment.

[Dean]

even better--to create them!

[Joyce S. Greene]

Yes, Dean, it is. But if someone is reading to you, it makes you feel loved and protected - that's not such a bad feeling either. Thanks for stopping by to read and comment on my words.

[Dean]

Many of us need to feel love.
We talk about it, but it's a scarce commodity

[Kelly Scheppers]

I am overjoyed to have discovered your poetry today, Joyce! It's as beautiful as those that are written verses upon verses long.

My best,
Kelly

[ShelleyA]

Hi Joyce. A lovely write of love and romance. Excellent use of brevity and a skillfully crafted Tanka. Perfect form. Good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. I love the passion, the 'storm' of this piece. Good word choice. Nice alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

[MsJewel]

Oh Joyce! The imagery in this romantic poem is breathtaking. Absolutely stunning description of the moon and of romance. Love it! :) Julie

[Anthony Hall]

Brilliant, loved it, great ink..Tony**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

another beauty...the stormy weather outside, the storm of beautiful words inside.

jacob

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh so very romantic, Joyce! I like the way you described the moon....beautiful imagery! Well written. lydi**