he pounds nails

he pounds nails

A Poem by Joyce S. Greene
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a poem about the softness of a working man's heart

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he pounds nails

and pours concrete all day

then comes home

to touch me with calloused hands

and the softness of his smile

© 2013 Joyce S. Greene


Author's Note

Joyce S. Greene
Publication Credit: Ribbons 2011

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Oh my Joyce, how very beautiful. You have put an abundance of beauty and love in 5 lines. You are amazing!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Sounds about right...I'm into construction myself...and do tile work...this give a reflection in a way to me...

Posted 11 Years Ago


I love this piece, loving your work Joyce.

Posted 11 Years Ago


That was so beautiful that it made my heart ache. Sometimes the toughest looking men have the tenderest hearts. you have captured so much in only a few words....i am amazed. A really special poem here....loved it so much!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Love this. That the hands are hard-worked makes it all the more special when they are soft. Lucky girl.

Posted 11 Years Ago


and tired,but never too tired for his love of his life

Posted 11 Years Ago


Hi Joyce. A beautiful write about this loving attraction that is short, concise and succinct. A skillfully crafted Tanka. Perfect form. Good imagery, flow and tone. Line to line transition and breaks are well done. Very nice rhythm. Lovely depth of feeling and beautiful expression of love. Good word choice as is the alliteration, assonance and consonance. Well penned and a much enjoyed read. Write on!

Posted 11 Years Ago


"to touch me with calloused hands
and the softness of his smile"

Joyce, you have truly touched the heart of this writer. This is poetry with a pulse...and it stirs the imagination with awe!

My best,
Kelly



Posted 11 Years Ago


You have mastered a perfect description of devotion with unique brevity. This takes big talent.

Posted 11 Years Ago


You have said so much in so few words. Truly a stunning love poem! :) Julie

Posted 11 Years Ago



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