Just One Wish

If I had only one wish
I'd only wish for you...

All the things
I could choose from
wouldn't fill my heart like you do...

Just one wish
is what would let you be mine...

Society hates our love
but the One from up above
surely wants it to last...

All the power
that they have
can't forbid you and I
from sharing each other...

Just that one little wish
could mean the most
to you and me...

They can't understand
what you are to me
the greatest thing that's happened to me
jealousy prevents us from being free...

Just a wish
is all we'll need...

Author's Note

Pic not by me
Feedback is wanted.

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

If I had only one wish
I'd only wish for you...

All the things
I could choose from
wouldn't fill my heart like you do...

Just one wish
is what would let you be mine...
I like the whole poem but this one can be turned into a song...
Well penned.

[Shy Girl]

I can finally answer the review you gave me on "Just Things I Miss". This breathes of the forbidden...the wanting...needing...longing...of the beating heart. Just as I wished for that love to be always from that one person...a wish as powerful as this one you have created is very inspiring indeed. That all it takes is one person's love to make a dream a living existing possibility. Gives the rest of us hope as sure as the day follows the night.

I've wanted to tell you...thank you for the RR of each piece you create :) You aren't alone in the wish to have a love that fills you completely and never falters in its depth. One day you'll look up and see that love has a face you didn't expect...but is the best sight you will ever come across in your lifetime. :)

[J. F. Charleston]

You're welcome for the RR's and I must thank you multiple times for reading and reviewing. I'm always blown to pieces with your words in each one. I too hope that we both can find that love we are wishing for.

[Shy Girl]

:) You make me see what you write...remember what I feel as I follow your hand down the page...live along with you as your words form stories of thought. (that one is hard to explain...but I think you see what I mean there ;)

[J. F. Charleston]

Yes I do see what you mean. It's every day I hear that. I thank you for the wonderful support and friendliness you show me.

[Shy Girl]

I only hope that I can accomplish a trickle of your imagery into the pathways your heart travels everytime you touch the pen to paper... My imagery takes a totally different path...one that wanders the side streets at times..lol And of course you have my full suppport always...being friends tags on its heels... trailing within supports shadow. :) In one of those free phrase moods.. :)

[Alyssa Carlstrom]

Nice job! I feel like you're improving in every poem. Obviously you already know this, but it's good to have a reader at the very start, not have them debate about whether they should go on or not. For me, I was hooked at the very first stanza because I'm really into romance.

100/100!

[J. F. Charleston]

How are we to improve if we dont keep doing it? Yeah it shouldnt be where you debate to keep reading or not. Thanks for the review.

[Tabitha t]

I dont mean to offend you just in case, but to me this sounds like a gay/les/bi/trans love poems. Which I am all for so in that case....love it! if not its still a gret poem

[J. F. Charleston]

Thanks for the review. Its not about that. Its about a male and female who love each other butwhere they live, society wont allow them to be together like in ancient times. I was kinda startled about your review. Dont get me wrong, but it was good to have some feedback.

[Tabitha t]

Well I like the story you originally had for it but it would work for that kind of thing to so great job

[N!LoC]

"society hates our love".... what does that particularly mean?

[Coyote Poetry]

A beautiful poem of love. I like the feel of love and the struggle to overcome the negative people. I like the complete poem. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote