Darkness Falls

What is darkness, but the absence of light?

My friend ended up being the end of me.

I'm not sure if that's his intention; to see

me crack under the weight of the oppression

brought about by his absence. My impression

was that he was unaware.  With him being

in such close proximity, merely seeing

would be as easy as a slight turn of head.

Yet at the ends of it all, here I am dead.

Alone and wrapped in the cold embrace of night.

It's veil covers all; suffocating my plight.

I cry for you to come, but you stay away!

Faint and at a distance... that is where you stay.

Do you look down and see me here right now?

Do you laugh at me as if I were a sow?

I suffer in this abysmal hell alone.

A punishment for the crimes I can't atone.

I have missed being wrapped in your warm embrace.

So why then, is it that you have turned your face?

Surely, soon, this hole will be my very own grave.

Gone is all of the love you once freely gave.

Here... in the dark, I think only of one thing.

Where is the light whose praises I once did sing?

Darkness falls. is this the end?

Where are you? My light... my friend...

Author's Note

My first time venturing into dark subject matter. Please judge accordingly. I take criticism well.

Reviews

[Edis Radoncic]

I enjoy the vibe of this poem. It also feels sociological to me. No matter what we are creatures that are not meant to be alone, we are not robots at the end of the day. Especially if we have a friend that we considered to be close to (I'm assuming in the poem that this person had one friend) and just shuns you and that can make you feel crazy about being alone. Great work!

[John Elridge Medlin]

Thanks bud! My favorite thing about this poem is the different thoughts that people have of the purpose of it. Art is a subjective thing. That's why I love it! I'm glad you enjoyed this one. This is the pride of my poetry collection.

[Gee]

To me,and I'm probably way off,this is you losing your faith,feeling lost without your Lord.Flowing easily a pleasure to read.

[John Elridge Medlin]

Its open to interpretation. Thanks for the review!

[Jake Kokoris]

This poem gave off a feeling of dull pain. Maybe daily loneliness, or difficulty in seeing a purpose, rather than some cataclysmic event. I wonder if the "you" is an ex lover or maybe a part of yourself you wish you could reclaim. Could the friend be the idealized version of yourself? Overall there are many lenses you can shape this from and I liked the elasticity of it. Oh and the font and eclipses gave off a hurried feel which I felt added a lot.

[John Elridge Medlin]

Thanks bud! When I was writing this I was aiming for it to be somewhat open for interpretation. I wrote it when I was doing research on cave divers being caught inside of caves. I imagined what it would be like for them. To live their entire life on the surface. Sunlight is just a comfort that we've grown accustomed to. For them to then be stuck at the bottom of a pit only being able to see the thing they once knew so well from a distance. Going back and reading it, though, I experienced loneliness due to the end of a friendship. I appreciate the review. :)

[carlien321]

nicely said, can feel the loss that was felt.

[John Elridge Medlin]

Why thank you! I appreciate the review.

[jeannemarie coulter]

a well penned tapestry of words...smooth reading and word flow makes it a pleasure to read even though the subject is dark...

[John Elridge Medlin]

Thanks! I promise my stuff isnt normally this dark. Ill be sure to upload some of my more whimsical things soon.

[Marshall Schoth]

I really feel as if I am absorbed completely in this distopia of live you describe. Phenomenal work!