Imperfection

Two sides to a thought.

I was having a spirited conversation with my other me.

Then my other me asked, “What's the old saying,

(Write what you feel and feel what you write.)."

Well, I was beside myself when I replied,

“But then there is acceptance within the whole,

a place to vent, to share, to receive those coins

of praise that can't be spent on anything,

other than more ink. You know the kind I mean,

the kind that dribbles on the pages.”

“Not so,” says the other me, “dangle a participle

and they will be at your throat so fast that you

will delete the content, googled photo and all.

“So, what am I to do?” Me asked my other self.

“Find a gentler space, somewhere between the Dots

and the Tiddles, somewhere where the odd things go

to paint their pictures just as they see them.”

“You Mean?”

“Yes, 'tis the land of Inspiration,

in the valley of printed Folio.

Ride, boldly ride,

to that place called “Aficionado”.

Hey, forget about it! This poem is about imperfection,

right?

JE Falcon

03-22-2022

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Imperfection is perfect poetry.
Just as imperfections make humans more perfect.
the conversation with self reminds me of Robert Creeley and his conversational poetry...Gives it
much more life.
a poem that is too polished might just be blinding...
a poem that is flawed, human, might just be more poetic.
very much like this.
j.

[JE Falcon]

Ah, if mankind were perfect why would they seek God?

[Sami Khalil]

We all have a "Qareen"; a spiritual double, and we tend to talk to it within all the time, all day long; endless conversations back and forth until we can come to a conclusion of thought and action. Some might call it the "Monkey mind." Any way, you played ping , pong with it and did not need a bong.
Excellenteeee.

[JE Falcon]

I sometimes wonder if the Buddha, who termed this mental state of Monkey mind, “Kapicitta,” was the early-historical equivalent of Sigmund Freud, being many of his teachings were rooted more in phycology than religion. But, hey, what do I know? The other me is doing all the thinking around here, and it is unclear which Monkey is which. LOL

[Sami Khalil]

At least you are monkeying with Poetry. Just kidding.
Keep up the good and creative works.

[Chris Shaw]

An amusing and witty write. You know it is the imperfections that make us unique. Perfection is intimidating. I talk to myself too.

Chris

[JE Falcon]

Thanks, Chris. Don't we all? --- But I have to admit, it is the 3-way conversations that then to disturb me most. :)

[DidIWriteThat]

Oh gosh, you totally understand being a writer...this is very heartfelt. I love the vulnerability of it all.

I hate to comment on punctuation/style, but i will here just because the missing quote at the end of the first paragraph had me reread it three times before i got in the flow. i would rate this a 95 though because the content is so good and relatable.

[JE Falcon]

Thanks so much for the heads-up on the quote marks; I would make an excuse but I don't know how that happened(?) It's fixed. :) --- And thanks for the look-see, review, and the 95. ...

[Ookpik]

Hey JE. I think I can appreciate where this is coming from, and like that you phrased it all with dialogue. I'm not really in a place to say why people write the things they do - in a lot of ways I think everyone has their own answer. Personally, it's probably a strange mix of OCD and emotional masterbation: jerking certain ideas around until they become loose enough for me to feel like I can understand.

That said, the feeling I get when I produce something I didn't think I could - something that tops my last best work - well, that'd probably be the orgasm, self relieved or otherwise. What seems to complicate things is when the jerking forms a circle, and everybody gets to bumping elbows in a race to finish quickest. lol.

Apologies if that's a bit much, crass or the like, but regardless I appreciated reading and hope, at least, that it's worth a laugh.

Thanks for writing, cheers.

-Ook

[JE Falcon]

Cheer back. --- That was an interesting analogy. But I think that I would have likened it more to a blue-collar group of people looking at the same nude and drawing what they see. Then the history teacher comes around and judges all of them for their artistic talent. And, of course, the person who drew the Stickperson is proclaimed the winner. --- But this is really about finding a place where you can have fun posting your own work. ---At least, I think it is. LOL

[Ookpik]

Lol Looking back, I probably ought not have likened the whole thing to a circle-jerk. I like your analogy better - aside from being cleaner, it's probably a little kinder too. hah!

At least I walk away with a grin. : )

Thanks,

-Ook

[JE Falcon]

Hey, call-um as you see-um. ... I have no problem with that. I did find your analogy entertaining.

[Ken Simm.]

Excellent, intelligent and above all witty. If that does not achieve perfection somewhere I don't know what does.

[JE Falcon]

Ah, thanks Ken Simm, I try to stay on the lighter side.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I really liked this very creative.
Funny thing is when you said 'what's that old saying'. I thought you would say there's a crowd.

[JE Falcon]

"Tere's a crowd." LOL --- That would have knocked everybody off their P's and Q's. --- Thanks, Cherrie.

[Cherrie Palmer]

...three is a crowd ... darn autocorrect

[JE Falcon]

Even funnier, LOL