And She Left

Another chapter from my book

When he woke up, he found himself floating in a boat in a dark misty water. The last thing he could remember was her scream and a huge shriek.

He got up, trying to make sense of where he was.

He shouted with all his breath into the darkness and waited for a response, yet he got none. Then, he saw a light far away into the mist. He started rowing the boat towards the light, till it hit land. He got down from the boat and started walking towards the light.

As he went closer to the light, the mist started to fade away and things were more visible to him.

He saw a woman sitting on a bench and a tree nearby her burning in fire, causing the light.

As he moved towards her, she turned her head and he knew who that was, it was THE WOMAN.

He ran as fast he can, a race between his heart and his feet, but when he went near her something hit him and he fell on the ground.

While he was down, he recounted where he was before this place happened and he also understood that she was with him in that place too. He got up as quickly as he could and tried to reach her again. But there was something in the air between them that was preventing him from getting near her, like a force field.

He was panicking. But when he looked at her face, there was just a smile on her lips and calmness in her eyes, looking at him.

She got up from her seat and walked towards him, slowly and elegantly. They were near to each other, yet far, as this force field was preventing him from touching her. 

Then it hit him, a realization, he fell on his knees.

She stood near him looking down on him.

'Are we dead?' he asked.

'Not yet' she said with a smile.

 
He lowered his head and said 'I'm sorry. It’s all my fault'

She brought her face near him and said ' Nothing is your fault. You've brought me nothing but happiness. You've got me this far.'

'Why am I not able to be with you? So close to you, yet so far'

'When I told you we are not dead yet, it means we are at the edge of it. But the twist here is that only one of us have to go back'

'What do you mean?'

'I have to leave'

He felt it, the huge pain inside his heart, confirming that he was the one being cursed, with life, without her.

'Please… Please… Don't do this to me. You are my last hope.'

'You have a destiny to fulfill'

'You are my destiny'

'If only I can tell you the things I know. But that’s not how things work. Time will give you all the answers you need. All you need to know is that I'm sacrificing the rest of my time for you. Use it well. You will not know anything that is happening right now, when you wake up. But, you will feel it every day of your life'

'Don't go. Please no. You're all I have. You are my light. I’m scared of darkness. Please don't let me go. I won’t last a second without you. I'm nothing without you'

 
His eyes were clouded by tears.

 
She knelt down.

 
'Listen to me, just listen. Life will be chaos, life will be very confusing for you. But, you will be okay. From now, I will not be the light that glows around you, but the one that ignites you from the inside. Go write it out, write your life. I will always be there around you, with you' she was able to touch him.

Her hands on his cheek as a sign of comfort and a kiss on his forehead as sign of goodbye. She then withered as the dust and disappeared.

 
He felt a weight pressing him down from his heart.

 
He felt it, he felt like being lost, then found and again being lost again.

 
With the thoughts 

*why is it that even my wish a sin?*

 
He closed his eyes.

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The nurse rushed into the doctor's room and shouted

'His heartbeat…’ She was stammering.‘It's… It's... Rising.’

‘What?!’ exclaimed the doctor.

‘He’s still alive’

‘That’s impossible’

The doctor rushed towards the emergency room.

As he left his room.

The clock behind the doctor’s chair showed 

11:11.

 

 

Author's Note

Any review of yours will be highly helpful:) Hope you like this:)

Reviews

[R Smith]

its a quite remarkable piece of writing, the story has the makings of being a huge success, i can find no fault in your work, bravo :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thanks for your blessing richard:)

[Gurleen Saluja]

Haven't read the chapters earlier. But this one has given rise to curiosity for your work. Well written. Sooner would go through the other chapters as well. Hope to see further work shortly. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thanks gurleen:) hope you continue your support for my future works:)

[Deepika]

This write kept me hooked till the end. I somehow felt there was a slight resemblance with the opening scene of Dan brown's Inferno :P Liked the story line. The clock display made me wonder it's significance and numerology says that's an auspicious sign..so i conclude something interesting is awaiting ;)

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thank you deepika... honestly i'm yet to read brown's inferno... but glad i could build up a setting as close as his... the numbers do have a very important part in the book.. can't reveal much though. :P

[Isabella Disney]

Woooo!! that was intense! love how it ends, with the 11:11. Great touch. I also really liked the imagery of the women, and its really.. touching and hopeful how the women gives the rest of her time up or him.
Great work!

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thanks isabella:) isn't there anything we wouldn't do for the sake of love???

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good chapter. You create desperation and a lot of emotion. I liked the conversation and the ending. The strong description create vision of someone holding on to someone they love. Thank you for sharing the excellent story.
Coyote

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thanks coyote:) nice words you have for the chapter:)

[Coyote Poetry]

A well written chapter and you are welcome.

[Chain of Hearts]

Love it! It is spectacular. The first chapter was awesome, this one is even better! Keep writing!

Looking forward to the next chapter :)

-LK

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

thank you:) I hope to transcend with each chapter!!!

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

OMG!!!! brilliant!!!!!!!!! I got flowed in the words!!! it seemed so real as if I was there...!! *claps* amazing work mateee!!! full of feelingz!!!

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thanks amulya:)

[Saddam]

It is great writer and an Interesting play with situation.
First I think it is normal but you rise it at the end.
Great friend....

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

thank you saddam:)

[TheOne&Only]

For some reason it HURTS me I read with tears building in my eyes, as if i felt the pain of both the woman, and man,.., BEAUTIFUL!.However...I have a feeling, in your book. she wont be going anywhere, & that's the chapter I look forward to reading...Thanks for sharing.

[Jerald Infant Jeyarethinam]

Thank you.... people we truly love never leaves us no matter where we go