Nature..Natural Changes

True experiences; right from my backyard

The sun warms my shoulders;
The breeze separates each strand of hair.

The flowers' aura sweetens the air,
The trees buckle slightly against the wind.

The birds chirp,
the wasps wisp by freely.

Nature goes undisturbed.

The swing molds under my weight,
My feet sway lightly, kicking off the ground.

The birds sweet music opens my pore's,
Rushing through my veins.

Nature causes an out-of-body experience.

For once I couldn't care about time passing;
Truly and beautifully unnoticed.

The smell of pollen sways between my eyelashes;
It pulls my senses under; a smile tugging.

Nature closes my eyes; a gentle force.

Chilliness creeps;
Goosebumps creasing my skin.

Shivering internally, my fingers twitch;
I sense a shadow above my head; nightfall.

The earth has become still;
The air- moist with humidity.

Attacking my eyes- fluttering open;
A different feeling arising, my body adjusts;

Earth switches it's axis- permanently.

Nature has changed seasons.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Celeste21]

You've captured keen perception with this piece. I almost felt like I was right there with you on the swing. There is a sharpness toward the end. Idk why but I felt alarmed when the darkness fell. Was this your intention? At the end when you said the earth switches its axis permanently it almost felt like a death. Like something more traumatic occurred because of the words "permanently." If this was intentional it's kind of brilliant. You brought us from child-like innocence the swing into an abrupt end. As if your childhood and every feeling childhood brings has ended into a new season. captivating regardless.

[Desert Dreamer]

To become so immersed in nature that one is not aware of the time passing...wonderful.

[Shayne Winchester]

Fantastico. I really love how creative this piece is. So descriptive, and really captivating. Keep it up. :)

[Crayon]

I really liked it. Amazing imagery it is truly beautiful. My only tiny problem was the sentences in bold and italics, i felt like they jarred me out of the pleasant dreamlike state the rest of the poem put me in. But besides that I love it :)