Hatred & Lonliness

As I lay in a daze,

Life passing, lost in a never ending, parallel maze.

Everything’s opposite, tears shed;

Not downward, but upward, running across my head.

Thoughts of insanity running loose,

The decisions are made, my life, I cannot pick and choose.

Do I hate this? Or myself? Is that even possible?

Thoughts of my past actions, brutally slamming into one another, like an unwritten novel.

I’m crashing, fast and hard it cannot be stopped,

Like a lifeless fetus outside the womb, gracefully dropped.

In a zone of hatred and loneliness,

I’m not as strong as I portray for know I will never overcome this.

Battling a war in which has no settlement of right or wrong,

My own conscience questioning my mind: what and why, has this been going on for so long?

Uneasy plans, blank stares, crushed dreams,

My life, as I know it, is not all it was suppose to be.

For I know I will never overcome this,

I’m not as strong as I portray in a zone of hatred and loneliness.

Author's Note

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Reviews

[TheFemininePad]

This poem is kind of hard to understand. I don't feel your emotions coming though with this particular writing as well. I don't see how you relate to the material. Writing should be about passionate emotions that you are able to translate into words. Each poem you write should be drawn from your creative mind that allows you to write poetry to is relevant to you. I just don't feel your emotions within the poem. The structure seems weird as well. I'm thinking for this poem you might want to reduce the word count. Poetry doesn't always have to be long poems. There is some work that needs to be done with this poem. Overall it's not a bad start though.