RE-Birth Aquatic

Baptism....we just can't move on ...with all that "past" sticking to us.... God says " come as you are"... but ya have to let go. from a pic prompt ...this isn't the pic ...lost in the meley

Slow steady kiss

of summer sun,

warms the  flesh

between my spirit

and the sea.

 

My senses fill

with salty breeze,

alluring sky and surf

compete their plea.

 

 

Seagulls dare

tendrils of foam

that tease the tideline,

chattering cries of heresy

a dirge,melodic requiem….

of a broken former me.

 

Tiny crabs

play  scamper tag.

Lay in wait,

to audience

 my eulogy .

 

 

Death of flesh

and latent sins,

cleansed by waves,

caressing promises

from God

of things to be.

 

Hour draws on ,

yet time stands still,

endless sky

offering indemnity.

 

Within myself

at oceans whim,

eternal holy grail

releasing me.

 

Baptisms’

inner Eucharist,

a season

drowned

In absolution,

Now….

I’m

 

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© 2007 J. Hampton [email protected]

Reviews

[Mr. Deft Diction]

I think you did your thing with this! I love the melodic flow...

You see??? I'm getting my mind expanded every time I read you; that's why you see my writing going other places!

And what better place to visit re-birth; the fluidity of it all is just too great to see it any differently!

EXCELLENT!

[Jordan Harpter]

Another wonderful poem with great imagery!

God Bless

[Leah Simone]

Love the picture of "Ophelia" -
To be drowned in absolution - to be forgiven for all the wrongs and submerged in peace as if it is water - would feel like heaven. This is a beautiful poem - Leah

[András Lá..]

wonderfull piece, nicely colored with near realyty and fiction like tenderness
love it
andy

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I have read Re~Birth Aquatic several times. This is a spiritually charged piece of work, which has had a personal impact my heart. Focussing on references to your words, ' promises from God' and 'inner Eucharist', gave me an soulful warmth. Great poem!

Blessings

Phillozofee

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

J...This is an outstanding write, I love the flow and imagery of this piece, a hands down 5 Star poetic masterpiece!.....Excellent work sis!

[Brooklyn Darkchild]

Yes Lawd.
How wondrously metaphoric; a baptism by the ocean's edge ridding us of what the Apostle Paul called: "the old man," making us new creatures indeed. The blue font suits this, representing ocean/sky at their finest. The imagery easily conjures up the best sights and sounds of the seaside. I especially loved the last stanza, from its reverential language to its formatting.
He who the Son sets free...
is free indeed.
Hallelujah!
Be Blessed!
DC

[Gandré]

You are able to invest your poem with all kinds of fascinating exotica.
"alluring sky and surf
compete their plea. " ==========>>>>my favorite metaphor...

You are such a clear thinking poet, you manage, through analogy,
"Slow steady kiss
of summer sun,
warms the flesh
between my spirit
and the sea. " =>>>>a great analogy


metaphor,
"Death of flesh
and latent sins,
cleansed by waves,"

logical argument,
"Seagulls dare
tendrils of foam "


and example
"that tease the tideline, "


to make his points with the kind of clarity that poets rarely reach. I liked your beautiful poem very much.