Enduring...Things

Time....Procrastinators...panic

 

As a child

I dreamed of wings N’ things

and

places far away

to carve my name in destiny

enduring …forever

enduring…me

 

Life takes its toll like onion skin

cast sheet-by-sheet

by random winds

 of change

leaving only ..this half-naked "she"

 

Precious days move on

the more I look back

the less that I see

while Big Ben gets his groove on

what have I done to secure legacy ?

 

Drone of the metronome

in hindsight I’ve learned

from two-sided candles

and bridges I’ve burned

 

Not all mountains have footholds

nor do all dreams have wings

arriving without them

births the faith

for

enduring things.

 

©2007 J. Hampton

 

Reviews

[Roy L. Pickering Jr.]

Philosophy and Poetry make for sublime bedfellows when brought together just right, as this poem shows. Its rhyme structure is impeccable and the lessons profound. And best of all, this poem has a little funk to it with lines like "As a child I dreamed of wings n� things" and "While Big Ben gets his groove on". Nicely done

[Sharla Gentile]

A beautiful poem about endurance, faith in God and in oneself.

I so enjoy your writing style. It has a rythmn all its own and flows so sincerely, with a tremendous amount of passion.

[Helen Woodward]

Everytime you look back you're sorely dissapointed because your memories become faded and out of proportion, but they will endure. I loved this because I could understand it as always with your work. I guess with regard to legacy, dreams and memories are all we take with us.
I really liked the analagy of the onion skins to life, very clever Jen...

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This is so touching, a real look at how life is and where it can take you. The realization of what you learn, and the disappointment of what never was. Beautifully written.

Not all mountains have footholds,
Nor do all dreams have wings.
It�s arriving without them'
That confirms my faith
For enduring things.

I like the ending you have here. to me it's like learning and finding yourself. I loved this Jen!
Kates

[Phill Oz O'fee]

There is a saying that goes:

We get too soon Old and too late Smart. I like to think we get wiser with age!

This is a wonderfully poetic antidote, for the downhearted -

�That confirms my faith
For enduring things.�

Lovely, philanthropic write!

God�s Blessing
Phillozofee

[M J Moore]

OK, this isn't fair, this is beautiful! Wonderful and I'm amazed. Such moving words here. I can't say enough of how great. I really like your style. Your ideas are wonderful and wonderfully expressed and articulated. I'm just afraid I can't say anything here that hasn't already been said, sadly enough.

Marie said best. Wonderful work here

[Marie Starr]

i really like this echo in the first two stanzas of "Me" and "she" ... and the added emphasis on each with the Me being capitalized and a sentence to itself and the "she" being lower-case and at the end of "Down to my naked half-done ..."

each stanza has this intactness to it that almost makes it stand alone, and yet they all flow together so fluidly, and they all connect so rightously!

and the end ... the end, i am loving ... i always have difficulty with any ending i create that seems as positive as this ... i'm always scared of sounding (or seeming, or being) trite ... but this last stanza is inspired without losing depth ... that takes some true talent ... which i can see you've got a lot of ...

i have one piece i'm stuck on that is all about how i used to fly when i was a young girl & how nobody ever noticed it or saw me or if they did they denied it to be true, until i eventually accepted their belief that it was impossible and lost the ability ... but i've never been able to make it work ... this piece makes me want to go back and re-visit it ... to try again ... maybe this time it'll come together ...

Not all mountains have footholds,
Nor do all dreams have wings.
It�s arriving without them'
That confirms my faith
For enduring things.

yeah ... i just love that last stanza ...

[Mr. Deft Diction]

"Drone of the metronome.
In hindsight I�ve learned
From two sided lessons�
And candles I�ve burned."

I LOVE "metronome"! Always have loved that word. This thing flowed like water...

Nice write!!!

[Bubo]

All the childhood things we dream and don't achieve,loved the flow, and the little quirks.Nice work!

While Big Ben gets his groove on'
What have I done to secure legacy?