Man- UP

Re dedicating this... To my "Uncle-in-law who was shot twice in the back last night five minutes after he & I chatted in front of the Chinese take out...two Rededicated to Uncle Joe ..shot twice in the back 5 minutes after we chatted outside by a teen

           

 

Man….down…Man..DOWN

I SAID…..MAN- DOWN !

 

 

 

Sooo...Who ...is gonna  man-UP now ?

 

When everywhere I look

I…SEEEEEE

ANOTHER broken-hearted single-Mother..

ANOTHER…Financially OVER-stressed …desperate and Waaaay UNDER-dressed Sister

ANOTHER .. Absentee Father with a broken Mind…Packin’ heat. …or Doin’ Time 

ANOTHER .. brother sportin colors in the streets

Leavin his family... in pursuit of  ...BEEF ????

Taking on the waters of ...NO …RELIEF

 

ANOTHER… Neglected…ABUSED…Spiritually starved…and academically EXCUSED

Child of GOD….

 

Caught up …in BLING…DUBS …GUNS…GANGS..SEXUAL LUST…material THINGS …and CLUBS…

Or  can’t get a break

JUST-PLAIN…Givin’ Up

Is …DOWN

 

A Million men…… Can march

A Billion men …… Can talk about the Million that do

A Trillion men …… Can …sit up in some CORPORATE –Think-Tank

Getting ..PAID TO…think up soulutions…TO…

PROBLEMS they NEVER went through

A Gadamadazillion men… Can MAN-UP another jonah…

or tip up another Red Bull..

Wondering …

what it would be like.. ?

to be… a statistician

 

….INSTEAD of a statistic !

 

NOT-knowing his inheritance

Or that his place

Is ABOVE …and not below

BLESSED and not stressed

And the responsibility to… his own purpose and destiny

 

They just DO… NOT .. Know…

that freedom…life

And abundance

Are in the word of God

And Jesus ALREADY Paid their way

In FULL

 

Don’t toast the fallen

From

The crabs-in-a-barrel cup

When you get your shine

Lift another

MAN….UP !!!!!

 

  

Psalms 82:5 ~ says

“ They walk about in darkness..they hear not…not do they see or understand…and all the foundations of the earth are off course”

 

2007 J. Hampton 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Psalms 82:5 ~ says

“ They walk about in darkness..they hear not…not do they see or understand…and all the foundations of the earth are off course”

 

Author's Note

#1 ) " Men"...just are NOT ...in their place
#2 ) The whole "crabs-in-a-barrell " thing...is JUST...NOT...Workin' people...lift another man Up !
#3 ) This is the open-mic version ...so it is -what-it-is !!!

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

What about the ghetto talk ? Does this somehow enhance
the meaning of your poem ? I doubt that very much.
I am not impressed with the language or the topic.
Man/woman pretty much get out of life what they put in
to it. I don`t think we can choose a loose life and then cry
for God to fix it. Does not make sense to me.
Now that I have had my rant, the technique and message are
quite clear, your punctuation is good and you probably deserve an
'A' for effort.

[Michael Lasalle]

j, thank you for sharing your talent, this is expressed as poetry should be,
its touching in form alone, the words speak straight to the readers heart,
with wisdom and knowing, with power, passion, you leave the reader with a
sense of added knowledge, peace, mike

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

This is an amazing write, raw, power and beauty of this piece is outstanding!

[Vanessa Pang *aka* Ness..]

i liked that. ending(And only ONE man to pull another Man Up.) was perfect. and i dont know what they're talkin bout with the ghetto talk. huh?
anyways keep it up and keep it real.

[Fade]

Very strong work, and a strong message. Loved the part "A gadamadazillion men can Man-Up a notha jonah. / Wondering what it would be like to be a Statistician." The ending is tight too.

[Thug Life]

the end said it all.. ur right jus the one man upstairs. "Wondering what it would be like to be a Statistician. Instead of a Statistic. " thats my part right thurr!!!
and u said u wrote it to provoke minds? u def provoked mine.. think ill post ova this hater.

[Marie Starr]

I think this is my favorite part:

Wondering what it would be like to be a Statistician.
Instead of a Statistic.

but i like it ... i like it all ...

[Oskar]

Very nice Im not used to seeing diffrent styles of poetry and thanks for your reviews!

[Rowena Diamond]

I like this poem.. IT's witty and different. You can feel the action through your words. Good work :)

[Mishel Rosario Reyes]

Love your quotation to Psalms 82:5; nice poem, ---MIshel