~ Diffusing Family ~

~ Diffusing Family ~

A Poem by J. Hampton
"

Just an observation of irony....despite all family drama...when it gets gritty...we put down the shotguns till later ...nobody messes with family...but family !

"

My ideas
lie
like trivets...

protecting something
I
do
not
understand

 

From the

heat generated

by the depth

our heels dig in

"lukewarm heroes"
feel like marmalade
and
ancient fruitcake

there is rhetoric
in my matrix

and I'm too tired
to think about it

Lets drink Green tea
and juxtapose
reasons to
quit

like we always did
as kids
it was easier
to
be
the last
morsel
that everyone wants
and
nobody will take

let me rest my thoughts
on
the bench
between us
till things
cool off

or

are seized

by our allegiance

IN

the battle

outside ourselves

Blessssssssssssss










 

© 2008 J. Hampton


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This poem brought about a feeling of "Mutual Boredom" almost like someone who is lazy and suddenly feels the need to just release themselves from the dreary and communicate about happiness.

This..might sound odd but when I read it I nodded and smiled to myself then said, " I need a vacation from the norm."

I absolutely loved this, the general flow of the poem, as well as some of the blunt terminology you used. Great structure!

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.




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"Lukewarm heroes", juxtapositioning over green tea....these are very familial, intimate things that let the reader be there with this one. We've all taken up for our family at one point or another, only to turn around and ask yourself, 'why?', LOL!!! But WE'RE 'allowed' to do that...it's family!

I like this, J.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I come from a large family myself so I could really appreciate this. A wonderful write ingeniously composed.

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I get this! Even thow family can stress the hell out of you sometimes, thier still family right?
Great write!! Keep it up and never lose hope.
Kelley

Posted 16 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

You definately have a style of expressing yourself. It's uniquely your own. I understand the sword being drawn when it comes to family. No matter what,,,they are yours. Great piece. Rain..

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

This poem brought about a feeling of "Mutual Boredom" almost like someone who is lazy and suddenly feels the need to just release themselves from the dreary and communicate about happiness.

This..might sound odd but when I read it I nodded and smiled to myself then said, " I need a vacation from the norm."

I absolutely loved this, the general flow of the poem, as well as some of the blunt terminology you used. Great structure!

Posted 16 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

awwww, so much truth. As much as we dislike the toads in our own gene pool sometimes, we would defend them to the world. I like the words and the images you use and the way

the words
fall
down.

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 4 people found this review constructive.

i like the way you've written this, it's interesting ^_^

Posted 16 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.


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