Dr. Boddingtons Office

Another in the series

Lightning flashes through shattered glass,

A Nameplate on the door is illuminated.

Weathered letters etched in corroded brass,

The doctor with sadism left unsatiated

 

A cello plays droningly low in my head,

Fear fills me with the atrocities that were done.

Remembering all the stories my grandfather said.

I should have waited for the coming morning sun.

 

I reach for the knob to open the door;

And once again it opens seemingly at my will.

Startling me as it did the time before,

I wonder how many patients he did kill.

 

The room before me such a sight to behold,

Years of neglect as if time halted in a moment.

The air around me grew humid and cold,

Adding unto my personal torment.

 

The next moment the strangest of all;

And normally I would dare not confide.

From within the office I heard the voice call;

Calmly and distinctly it said “Come Inside.”

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

Story thicken even more with this excerpt of a write...

I would take out "The" in the lines:

The room before me such a sight to behold,
Room before me such a sight to behold,
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The air around me grew humid and cold,
Air around me grew humid and cold,
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The next moment the strangest of all;
Next moment the strangest of all;
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From within the office I heard the voice call;
From within I heard the voice call;

Last line of course... gives more appeal... we already know where you're heading... by the title... of course... just my thinking...

[K.C. Zbryk]

You capture this scene brilliantly and the suspense only grows as this piece progresses. I was held captive and had no choice but to continue, much like the main character. And the closing was just chilling!

[Raven Starhawk]

I like how you use a poem to tell a story. I have tried this but ultimately I fail. But even though that sad fact is ever more true now I can learn from example and praise your writing here.

[lark1311]

What an awesome way to tell a story. Especially this particular story as the style just adds to the eeriness! It says a lot about the skill of the writer. Looking forward to more!!!