IF LOOKS COULD KILL!!

well...it's a very funny poem...and I was trying to be bitchy. It's basically the feelings of a modern girl, about what she feels when she is cheated. I,firstly, didn't intended to post it but since it is mt first poem after i started writing again.

 

 If looks could kill,

Baby, I’m not gonna let you miss.

If looks could kill,

Baby, I’m going to check out Phil.

If looks could kill,

Baby, why are you lying with your only kit.

If looks could kill,

Baby, honestly, I’m not gonna miss.

 

I’m not the Lady Gaga,

With the poker face and twilight saga.

I’m not some Megan Fox,

Who is trying to pull up all your socks.

I’m not some Angie Jolie,

Voting as the sexiest in the pollie.

I’m not your Britney,

Who is in bed with all your kitty.

 

I’m not any normal girl,

I can make you sweat in your pants.

I can make your fingers wet ,

And scratch it on your crotch.

I’ve tried it on every man,

That’s why I’m here with you.Oh man!

Let me make one more thing clear,

‘I love you’ that’s a lie my dear.

 

Baby, you’re lying with only one kitty,

Now,you can’t have me,that’s a pity!

I know that kitty,in your bed,is a bombshell,

But she is a b***h that I can tell.

I thought you had that decent thing,

But you’re just full of all that s**t.

You’re the last to be forgiven today,

I don’t care if you’re a gay.

 

 If looks could kill,

Baby,I’m not gonna let you miss.

If looks could kill,

Seems like you’re the last to be kissed.

If looks could kill,

Baby, I know you’re not sorry for this.

If looks could kill,

Baby, I’m the b***h,

And I dump you,

Because, LOOKS COULD KILL!!

 

Author's Note

well...i m ready for all th harsh reviews and i don't write this stuff!!..FIRST TIME!! and that "kit" is like the girl with whom that guy cheated the main girl..!!

Reviews

[Dreamer (Kristen)]

I actually liked this, and that's becaue it's so different. It's easy to relate to, and fun to read, so I'd say it's a very good poem. keep it up, I'd like to read more. :)

Sweet dreams,
~Kristi

[Jackson Yang]

I enjoyed this poem. The words you used to describe the cheating person, the images you get when you read each stanza. To me, for your first time, this was well written. To be the person who was wronged and still be the person who finally pushed him away, you can learn something from this poem. Great job.

[Neeeks!]

This is definitely different from previous things I've read and commented on. I think it's very creative and original. I like how you compared the main girl to celebrities. This is really good.