These Words

The poem is on the picture I created. Enjoy~

Author's Note

This is a visual poem. Hope you were able to read it and hope you enjoyed it. Feedback is very much welcome.

I am also in the process of editing this poem sometime in the future so it creates a more powerful meaning.

Reviews

[Wednesday Morning]

I feel like the only reason your poem had any content that caught me was the fonts. I feel as though you're relying a bit too much on the visual aspect and you've forgotten that your writing about the power of words. To define it, as you've attempted, you must put more raw feeling into it. I'm sad to say I was disappointed.

[Chelle]

Thank you for your review. I appreciate the feedback and I'm glad you pointed out the lack of raw detail and emotions in it. This was written a few months ago and when I looked back through the poem itself after reading your review, you're definitely correct. I will probably try to rewrite this piece and elaborate more on the power of words rather than relying on visualization. Once again, thank you for your time.

[Astro]

I think ThatOne's point is valid, but you have some great lines here too, so don't be discouraged. The idea of using different fonts to highlight descriptions of how words can affect is great. The visualizations, are a bit misplaced, but not "useless". The only one that I think was really weak was the sunset reference because, sure the sun falls, and that I can understand, even that it melts, but sundown, doesn't usually, cause me to envision the bringing to life that you are trying to convey. Sunsets, usually, follow an emotion of loss or, finalization. All in all, I think you have an idea that with a little work, can be something special. Keep it up, don't be afraid to be original, and try something "strange".

[Chelle]

Thank you so much for your feedback. I'm glad you liked it. Although the reference I was making to the sunset wasn't actually a sunset, but a sunrise. However, I described it as a "melting sunrise" so that probably gave a bit of an oxymoron. I'll be careful of that next time. Once again, thank you for your time!

[Astro]

Hahah, I'm such a dork, guess I need some glasses. lol.

[Chelle]

Haha, it's cool. ^^