Black Tears from A White Soul

Hopefully, it will be easy for you to tell what it's about. But, if not...it's about a woman who's breaking up with her longtime boyfriend for another man.

I still love you
But I’m not in love with you
We said we’d be together
Forever
Who knew
Forever would come so soon

You were my first true love
And you’ll always be in my heart
I know it hurts
To part
Ways like this
I still remember our first kiss

Remember when we were outside
And it began to rain
Everything came to light
And I told you
I’d never feel the same

But one night
You weren’t here
My fears reappeared
That night I flash-backed through all four years
I still re-count the countless tears
I made love to someone
I thought could take away those fears

You hurt me
Remember that?
And deep down, I wanted to hurt you back
But I didn’t know how
And it drove me insane
But before I knew it
You told me you wouldn’t hurt me again

But it was already over
Finished
And I couldn’t undo
The thing I did to try to hurt you
I’m sorry for doing it
I really am
But I’m not going to give you the
“I hope we can still be friends”

We were better than that
All the cliches
I don’t want it to end that way
One day you’ll look back
And you’ll still hate me
But one day you’ll see why we couldn’t be

I’ve fallen in love with another guy
I don’t think there’s a reason to try
I know
You still don’t understand why
Please,
I just don’t want to see you cry 

Author's Note

I wanted the reader to feel bad for the guy getting dumped. That was one of my goals for this poem. In the poem, I didn't use a lot of punctuation (ie. the questions without question marks) you can just ignore that.

Reviews

[SimplyLove50]

Oh Awesome! Thanks to everyone!

[closed account]

this was a very clear written poem,, i love the simplicity,, it's a compliment from me!! you connected with the reader and their own situation, or maybe someones elses,, either way it was wonderful,... keep on writing,, you are great at it!

[Becca*Type2012]

Without the punctuation it kinda sounda a little choppy, but other than that it was a beautiful poem, and you accomplished your goal...I feel bad for the guy being dumped. Nice poem!

[Ryan]

The emotion is well expressed, and I love the rhyme, it flows very nicely ^^ over very nice. Great job!

[deeps]

We were better than that
All the cliches
I don't want it to end that way
One day you'll look back
And you'll still hate me
But one day you'll see why we couldn't be

I loved these here, I can really feel them
A very well written write here and well expressed emotion.