Sleeping eyes

I feel your warm touch
ever close to my lips

the blanket of your voice
is the music of my dreams

when the light dips
far beneath the sea

there on the shore
we walk hand in hand

in my sleeping eyes
you are there - always

whispering I love you
pon the fabric of my heart.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

so emotive...soft and deep comfort ..nothing like a sound, peaceful sleep .. and what I see pronounced in your poem ... is what a treasure to find someone that brings such solidity of trust to a relationship ... makes me sigh and want to dream dreams ;)
E.

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo E, your lovely words are appreciated.

[barleygirl]

I love the way your message combines the intoxicating sensuality of beach surroundings and the warm affection of the heart. This feels like sensuality from the heart more than from the crotch! *wink! wink!* (I like that!) Fondly, Margie

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo Margie, what a great comment!

[Digvijay Singh]

when the light dips
far beneath the sea
there on the shore
we walk hand in hand
.
These lines just had my heart. So beautifully written.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo for your kind words.

[Laurierose]

Very romantic. Such words as these could inspire a beautiful, love song. One could get dizzy on such a concoction of love. Very lovely. Great read.

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo, I appreciate your kind words.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

ooh i love this it would go well in my current comp re love etc.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Julie, I appreciate your visit.

[Mari' Emeraude]

Sweet and melodic. The beauty of a seaside romance!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, I appreciate your visit and kind words. Many mahalo, Izzy

[emmajoy]

' in my sleeping eyes - you are there - always .. .. whispering I love you -. pon the fabric of my heart.'

Forever beautifu. Forever love. Dear, dear friend.

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo my friend, I appreciate you very much xo

[emmajoy]

Forwarding a little blue cuddly hug, and, a larger rainbow coloured loving hug.. Take your pick, darlin;!

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Yes my ohana, we walk in love upon many shores together- and sometimes the shores overlap each other. Your poem is amazing- a sleeping , waking, loving vision of lyrical lines and wondrous metaphors of the sea. Your song has notes of the bittersweet
romantic Scottish lore of the kelpie. Truly we are fluid, like the sea. And like the sea, our love is endless and flows into each other’s soul. Master Class song of eternal love my dearest sister. Xo

[Island Hippy]

I love your words, Lani loved the sea almost as much as he loved us. Many mahalo & aloha my ohana xo

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Aloha my ohana! Hope the three of you are all feeling and doing well. Hope Baby Izzy is growing bigger and getting ready for her debut! I love your words too. I love this picture of Lani carrying you so much. I know. I know. Sending you, little man Kalani and Baby all my love and kisses 4-Ever. I wish you peace my sister. Xoxoxo

[Chris Shaw]

Simply beautiful dear Izzy. As soft as the whisper of a breeze on a hot cheek. Lovely words.

Wanting and wishing all the best for you.

Chris

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo Chris, your words seasoned with aloha. xo

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such a whimsically romantic write...love it...

it stitches our emotions into a love embrace.
j.

[Island Hippy]

Many mahalo jacob, your comment is beautiful. I’m glad it had that effect.