Dance with me

take me dancing
on Saturday night
when the fever
starts long and slow

my night potion;
physical, spiritual
emotion - always
arriving bought &
paid for with smiling
touching eyes
of such fondness,
sweeping & delicate

take me flying with,
dancing feet my darling
fingertips meet my senses,
no climbing fences
sparking this excess
of colliding souls - lead
me into temptation,
soothe my need, take me
dancing on Saturday night

Reviews

[wordman]

under the stars,soft music,romance in the air

[Island Hippy]

Indeed :) mahalo

[B]

I know that Saturday night feeling
you sit back after a long week
and by the time 8 pm kicks in
you get the fever
you wanna dress up and put that flower in your locks
and dance the night away with your baby

really beautiful

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, a lovely comment. Mahalo

[barleygirl]

I like the way your sentences are crafted to be free & easily flowing from one idea to another, conveying the lack of inhibition that can be felt when dancing. Excellent action & imagery. There's a teensy bit of swirling madness developing as the message goes along, until the final stanza seems a little crazed, in a good way. I like your building up of energy this way.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha barleygirl, that's a great comment I really appreciate your time. Mahalo!

[mattavelli]

Hello, Izzy! :)
This is a great write, lots of fun and love. My wife and I have a three year old. We dance at home pretty much every night.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha mattavelli, Mahalo for your wonderful comment. That's a lovely thing to know, beautiful image. My husband and I are expecting our first child in Sept. We have a lot to look forward to.

[mattavelli]

That's great! Sleep while you can. Haha

[richieb]

Aloha Izzy,
Your words sense complete surrender. Giving all of yourself, the dancing leading to romance. Dancing in a crowd but only aware of each other.
Fine write, enjoyed your work.
Richie b.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo for your lovely comment Richie I appreciate it.

[Gee]

Saturday Night Fever, yeahhhhhhhhh, the B Gees....go Johnnnny, go Johnny...
Like this Izzy

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Gee ... haha, great comment

[MsJewel]

I love the feeling of your words - happily floating upon the page in this wonderful little dance. Beautiful poetry my friend. :) Julie

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Julie what a lovely compliment my friend. Much appreciated

[duff]

Captivating content. It's a cool feeling when poetry can bring out a smile and you did exactly that. Great work Izzy!

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo duff :) I appreciate your warm comment

[duff]

You got it!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Don't get too carried away, Hippy! Loved your poem, might give me love lovely ydreams tonight!

[Island Hippy]

Haha...Mahalo. I hope so.

[Kittenincake]

"take me flying with,
dancing feet my darling
fingertips meet my senses, "

I like this, it's ethereal, sweet and picturesque.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo KC, I appreciate your visit and lovely comment