The fence

the fence around my heart is high
still I climb, splinters impale my
skin I need their piercing touch
to remind me to begin & begin
frankly, I'm tired of being
the only one willing
to climb.

Reviews

[duff]

I'm really digging the flow and vibe of this. Are we prisoners or are we free controlling the guest list. Content full of thought and depth. Nice work Izzy!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha duff, mahalo for your cool comment.

[duff]

You're welcome:)

[Ana B.]

indeed, all the climbing will lead nowhere if it comes only from one side....i loved the bittersweet tone of this...yet sometimes, fences are there for a reason...lovely done :)

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Ana, I appreciate your warm review. Mahalo nui. Izzy.

[Paul Bell]

Always interesting when we build barriers.
To keep us in, to keep someone out.
But in this, you need the barrier and the pain. But the other person doesn't seem willing. Stalemate. Like this Izzy.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Paul, great comment!

[Einstein Noodle]

what an interesting perspective ... instead of something or someone that brings the fence down ..climb out of it ourselves ..leave it up .. its part of our self as well as anything else isn't it ...your depiction of pain through slivers is graphic ..i feel it .. no pain, no gain ;} really like this unique take on the heart fence .. nice one!
E.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo E, I appreciate your thoughtful comment

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This metaphor is crystal clear and the punch in this short piece is full of pathos.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo John, I appreciate your visit

[James]

Wow, an interesting way to put this all-to-common trend. I'm a believer that the right person will climb with you at the right time.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo James, yes I believe so too. I appreciate your visit.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that fence will never come down if the one on the other side doesn't want it to....both have to climb together.
j.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Jacob, I appreciate your visit.

[emmajoy]

Brief words, laid finely, big meaning. There's a longgg story behind this thought, or, there could be!

[Island Hippy]

there is indeed :) mahalo oe Em.

[Island Hippy]

e hiamoe me ka maluhia -sweet dreams Em

[emmajoy]

I so love your words, they're like garlands of flowers! Good night, sweet dreams when you next put head on pillow...

[Mr.Writer]

I feel bravery throughout this awesome, lovely haiku! :)
Very well done!
I can feel as though I'm climbing the fence... :D

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo for your comment I appreciate your time.

[emmajoy]

My pleasure, always and always.. I'm off to bed soon.. trying to switch off, not working!

[Mr.Writer]

Wait umm, lol

[Mr.Writer]

Umm, never mind :D