Butterflies

I saw the most magical sight
a butterfly with magnificent
wings, sky blue, bordering
sunset pink feathering into
emerald, deep and crisp.

This fluttering thing glided
upon my Autumn breath
catching the warmth of my
adoring words. Perching
upon my nose, tickling &
mischievous.

My laughter set her delicate
wings to flight again, adagio
in high definition. She spoke
with a bee in animated voice
bursting with joy for life. The
bee, he hovered captivated
by her beauty. But he could
not find his voice all he felt
was butterflies.

Reviews

[Poetic License]

Oh my heavens - this is positively radiant! I absolutely love that this started about actual insects when I had excepted it to be about the belly flip flops!!! Then you dazzled me and brought it right back to my expectation.....once I no longer expected it! How wonderful! Coming to that end was indeed like seeing your butterfly. Magical, to be sure.

The depth of this piece leaves me dumbstruck. Upon reading several times, I can see a gentleman in the shadows, catching sight of this delightful woman, watching her interact with those she meets in passing, how he takes in the details of her glowing personality and brilliant warmth. He is utterly delighted to see her. He is so moved, he cannot even move toward catching her, to step into view, to say hello - she mesmerized him and she never knew it. As her laughter and delight sends her on her way after a brief greeting, he only knows he will not be the same. This has my imagination spinning out of control. An exceptional offering. Thank you for posting it here!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, I enjoyed your review and very much and appreciate you sharing your thoughts. I loved your imaginative spin as well. Mahalo Nui :) Izzy.

[apennylate]

I was impressed, then I was dazzled, then I was speechless at the double use of "butterflies"... Your words scintillate across the page with beats of wings... Captivatingly penned...

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo silente, for the great comment, much appreciated.

[apennylate]

Even greater read, I assure you, heh... My pleasure.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and he was "a-buzz" with emotion...poor bee...or lucky bee...one or the other.

nicely done

j.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Jacob :) haha, great comment. Much appreciated.

[Lorry]

Perfectly capturing the freedom of thoughts as well as the freedom of the butterfly, as well as the innocent pleasure that catching this sight gives the viewer...and in turn, the reader.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo Nemo :)

[duff]

Your imagery is gorgeous. Pretty and delicate strokes of the brush that bring such a beautiful creature to life for the reader to imagine. This was a most enjoyable read:)

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo for your kind comment, much appreciated.

[duff]

You're welcome!