Homesick

my island love
a strong proud
chest, sturdy
and steadfast

greet your arms
with smiling eyes
that long to rest
again in your
warm embrace

you are all things
that dwell beneath
my bones, akin to
my island sway

i long to taste
your flesh of
endless summers

hapa haole, my skin
but my heart akin
to ohana, as tears
reaqcuaint with
my pixelated lover.

Author's Note

Haole - island slang for someone of fair skin/caucasian
Ohana - family

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

smart and savvy ..love your closing line .. and your island metaphor is done just right for me ..i like it all ..start to finish ..held my attention...kept me drawn in .."island sway" placed just right ... refreshingly unique ..glad i stopped by
E.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo thank you very much. 'Island sway' refers to hula. I was English born but Hawaiian bred. Izzy

[LostBoy]

GREAT piece. I enjoyed the strong longing in it. Loved your word economy. Wishing you well from my island - R.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha mai, Mahalo Nui. Izzy

[LostBoy]

Learning Hawaiian with you. MANY thanks back.

[Island Hippy]

you're welcome

[ms. barrie]

you are all things
that dwell beneath
my bones, akin to
my island sway

i long to taste
your flesh of
endless summers --- my favorite stanzas!

gorgeous imagery that is enthralling. i so enjoy your harmonizing word-play and elegant dictation...that keeps the reader utterly engaged.

thank you for sharing - x

[Island Hippy]

Aloha mai ms. barrie :) I appreciate your warm and very generous compliment. Mahalo Nui Loa. Izzy

[ms. barrie]

you're most welcome, the pleasure was all mind -- barrie

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Oh, OH, I love the 4th stanza

"i long to taste
your flesh of
endless summers"

Wow, how delicious must it taste to have such an appetite for the home land of ones childhood

[Island Hippy]

Very nicely said. I have been quite homesick over the last few days. Mahalo Nui Loa.

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Awwww, I too miss my little island of Puerto Rico. i know just how it feels

[James]

Awesome. You're making want to hop on a plane for an island getaway

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo James

[Stan Lee]

This is a fantastic poem! I loved the use of some different words. The rhyming and meter were engaging too. My favorite part was "haole, my skin
but my heart akin". And as for pixelated lover, I can relate to that too. Thanks for sharing! :)

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo andronicus.

[Lorry]

When I get homesick, I miss Irn Bru soda, Scottish bread and square sausage....and I don't even like the taste of irn bru :)
This is beautifully told and felt, to know that your roots are deep and a belonging always follows you.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo nemonomore (is there a shorter name I can call you? Haha) that's a lovely review, I like what you shared.

[Lorry]

Nemo, or my real name... lorry.

[Papaya]

A very beautiful pocket of the world.
Really nice feel to this poem.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha, it is, and I miss it terribly some days. Mahalo Nui Loa. Thank you.

[Papaya]

I love it there, I've been a few times. So amazing.
I hope you get back soon.

[Island Hippy]

Awesome, always nice to hear. I hope so. My mom was a Maui girl, I'm proud I grew up one as well, despite being born in the UK.

[BBP]

Beautiful tribute to your home. I went to Hawaii once and I fell in love I can only imagine the connection you feel to island life.

[Island Hippy]

While I was born in the UK my mom was from Maui, I'm still a home girl :) but get teased by ohana for my haole skin that the only haole thing about me...haha Mahalo Nui Loa. Thank you.