The one

I've been staring at the sky
Stars lazily passing time
Deciphering secrets of the night
There are few things I know for sure
My love you are one.

Now I'm counting up
All my faults, a sorry for each scar
If I add, if I subtract
Put one here try & take one back
Our life was so much more than arithmetic.

When the years are showing on my face
When my strongest days are gone
When my heart and soul depart this place
From a life that sung your songs
You'll still be the one I want
You'll still be the one --
I love.

Author's Note

For my papa who misses my mom everyday.

Inspired by Bev Powers poem, Gardenia Perfume.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

so sorrow filled ... such a longing in grieving ...it can take a long time to recover ..some never do .. so we write about it eh!? well done in my opinion ..smooth and engaging ... my wife died a long time ago .. in '89 ... she was 30 yrs old :( but i see her in our children all the time ... so i know how much your dad appreciates you my friend! i think your poem is beautiful
E.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha E, I really appreciate you sharing. Seeing her in your children is such a beautiful legacy. Mahalo

[Einstein Noodle]

yes it is ... blessings to you too :)

[Gaurangi]

It is like a song, and is delicate and beautiful. Love the second para/verse. Keep infusing sentiments in your writing :)

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo, I really appreciate your comment.

[Coyote Poetry]

True love never died.
"You'll still be the one I want
You'll still be the one --
I love. "
The above lines. I do understand. The above lines goes for our elders also. Thank you dear friend for sharing your amazing poetry and thoughts.
Coyote

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo John, I appreciate your visit

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Once more you embed sentiment with a mixture of sadness and love in a flowing piece Izzy.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo John :)

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

Poignant and introspective. The sum of two lives, two linked souls."Our lives were so much more than arithmetic"...All my faults, a sorry for each scar"-just stunning. Beautiful flow. Brava ohana!

[Island Hippy]

Aloha ohana I seemed to miss this yesterday. Mahalo for your lovely warm words.

[James]

This was fantastic. It's rare to read something so smooth and moving. Graceful, is the best word I can think of and how it felt the first time through.

[Island Hippy]

Mahalo James, I appreciate your kind words

[gypsy scribbler]

It captures the mood. I like this one.

[Island Hippy]

Aloha gypsy, mahalo for the drop in.

[Gee]

When the years are showing on my face...love that line.
My face is year littered, many feet from many crows

[Island Hippy]

Aloha Gee, thank you for your comment I appreciate it. Izzy

[BBP]

This was beautiful! It had a nice flow and a tender touch.

And inspired by my poem? Youre crazy.....yours was so much better!

[Island Hippy]

The essence of your poem was the inspiration. Each piece is unique on its own though just a common theme I guess. Mahalo Bev.

[BBP]

:) well it was beautiful!

[Lorry]

Beautifully captured. Sometimes, we just know that which is irreplaceable and find no quarrel in the knowledge that this is how it is to be. We find peace in what we shared together and know that even the resonance of those times spent together, will forever be stronger than looking for throwaway love.
As this was about your parents, it can also restore our faith in human nature, that true love is unbreakable, even separated by dimension cannot break what we hold dear.

[Island Hippy]

Thank you so much I find your reviews so thoughtful and well expressed. Makes the poem look small...haha. I completely agree with your words true love is inbreakable. Thank you again. Izzy

[Lorry]

Well it's your words that made mine, so no need for thanks. But you're welcome....or should that be I'm welcome? :)