the Pen

An old poem of mine. This is for every pen we use. And dictate terms to.

the Pen

 

The point of all beginning,

All existence, all meaning

 

See him draw pathways,

And tiles, sometimes mountains

And render pain

 

Watch him scathe, the fluidity

Of his own face

 

Everyone employs him to

create origins, of his rivers

And tributaries from the busy stroke

Of a dictator nib

 

His holiday is a mere full stop,

Days are a calendar of curves, in a week of commas,

An exclamation is the brief laughter

Reverberating through a blackened ribcage of sentences.

 

See him fly all your kites

In the form of lines

And different strings

Of selected imagination

 

the Pen is the servant of an unpredictable scratch.

Author's Note

I wrote this when I was sixteen, about two years ago. So please, pardon my immaturity.

Reviews

[Miss Coral]

Personally, I really enjoyed this piece-- I think that while the flow could use some work, the imagery was quite good, and overall the writing was great. And, I don't think that the fact that you were sixteen when you wrote this means it's immature. (Though I may be just a tad bias, being sixteen myself) :P

Great piece!

[Aria]

there's no immaturity in this. in fact i didn't realize how old you were until now. this is a very creative write and unique. good work

[Sabbath_Nikole]

I really liked this. You have this flow, that twists and turns, I got caught up with it. Very nice.
"Reverberating through a blackened ribcage of sentences."
Thats my favorite line^ Not sure why but it just sounds wonderful, and different. I've never thought to describe it that way. Great Write!

[zombiikillah666]

this is oh so good.
i loved it. (:

[Bhavya Kaushik]

As a 16 year old, this is very mature and deep. I liked this piece a lot..it is very intense and yet so simple in its approach.
Great work here!

[GunMetal]

There's no immaturity to pardon. I don't believe your age affected how profound this piece is. I really liked it.

[Ruth]

An excellent piece! Being sixteen too, wow! Awesome! xx

[Manda]

wow this was really good! i loved it!

[Prateeksha Khot]

i really liked this one, and for a sixteen yr old it is pretty much good

[An owl on the moon]

This is deeply profound, moving us across landscapes of rich imagery and emotion. This is exceptionally stunning in its form and flow.

[Nirmala]

A good beginning to the imagery, but I agree that you can work on it much more now. The pen is history and the future and controls a good part of the present. I really like the last line ‘the Pen is the servant of an unpredictable scratch’ How very true!