Stone Of Angels: Introduction to Part I

When a girl ends up in a terrible car accident, she meets her judgment day at the great gates of holy glory. But what the angels had in store for her is much more than one could believe.

Stone Of Angels

Introduction to Part I

They say that when you die and go to heaven it's a peaceful coming. When you reach those glorious, golden gates, they open and you're finally home and free. But when I died and reached those gates, I was greeted by an angel with 10,000 wings, standing a good ten feet tall. He held a book with my name on and told me he was one of twelve angels of judgment. He said I would go through many trials that cause me great pain so that I fall to my knees and ask for forgiveness and then the Lord will give it. Feeling like this was some kind of punishment, the angel shook his head before I could even voice my thought. “You are not being punished. We're simply going through your life and mending what is broken.”

Mending what is broken... My soul, my heart. My being in entirety. “But I thought the flesh does not matter when you die and come to Heaven?” I questioned, but the angel only gave me a grin. “It does not, but we have other plans for your, my dear.” Puzzled by his words, my eyes searched his for answers that he hid so well. “Your spirit is made of angelic royalty, miss Assyria Bae. And your passing is not but a few minutes long. Soon, you will be reunited with your family back on Earth, but not without one thing.” He held out a stone that seemed to shine brightly with a luminescence that was much greater than anything else I've seen. “But what is this?” Taking the stone and holding it in my hands, I turned to look up at him. “A war is coming, Miss Bae and you are going to lead us. This is the stone of Angels, powered by Gabriel, Michael, and God himself. When the time comes, you will use this stone to fight.”

Without another word, everything around us became insanely bright. I couldn't see, but I could hear what sounded like beeping from a heart monitor and unknown voices that sounded panicked. My eyes opened and my vision finally became clear after a few minutes. There was a doctor hovering over me, and my parents standing idly on the other side. Was that all a dream? But it felt so real... Suddenly, pain washed over my body and the ache in my head made itself known. “Assyria! You're awake! Please, don't try to get up. You've been involved in a serious accident.” The doctor quickly fluffed up my pillows and began injecting something into my IV. “An accident?” I couldn't recall having been in any accident. The last thing that I could remember was getting up out of bed and going to take a shower. “Yes. A car accident. But don't worry, you're fine. You hit your head and you'll be sore for the next couple of days.” The pain in my body began to dull as the pain medicine the doctor had administered into my IV began to take effect.

I didn't question the doctor anymore about my accident, but instead, I found myself drifting off into sleep again. But this time, when I woke up, I was in my own bed. Pushing myself up out of bed, my legs began to wander over to the mirror as if they had a mind of their own. Perhaps it was my sub-conscience telling my legs what to do. There was a bruise and knot above my left eye and along my jaw-line was black and blue as well. I could feel the aches within my shoulder blades and back but my mind was too preoccupied thinking about what happened after the accident.

Was that all a dream? Or was it real? 

Author's Note

I've had this idea for a while... I guess I'll make this a mini-series.

Reviews

[Edwin-Nweze]

I actually disagree with a few writers here, I loved the information you gave in this first part. It intrigues me and makes me ask further questions, which I will read on to discover answers to. What is this war? What is the gem? What part is she going to play? What was the significance of the accident? Information certainly needs to be distributed throughout a longer piece or series, but rather than taking away information from here, you could simply build upon it later. I've read that after putting the character in such a situation, you then increase the conflict and suspense by asking yourself "how can I now make this even worse?" However, there were some grammar errors I picked up along the way. I enjoyed this piece and the fearsome grandness you quickly associated with the angel, even in such a brief piece. I look forward to part two!

[Cierra]

Thank you!

[NoelHC]

This is well written, and I found it interesting reading.
I agree with Jaylynn, revealing the secrets over time, in subsequent episodes would be a great device to ensure readers keep coming back.
I like the language, the grammar and the concept a great deal.

Noel

[Cierra]

Thank you!

[Jaylynn]

I found this interesting, but I feel that since you mean for this to be a longer piece that you gave too much information too soon. You threw a lot of details about our protagonist in that second paragraph, and I felt a little overwhelmed (like that she is angelic royalty, and is going to lead the angels in a war). I think it'd be better to slowly give us details and story than shove it at us in the beginning, especially because I have no idea "who" Assyria is.

I know this sounds like I didn't like it, but I did find the concept interesting/intriguing and can't wait to read more.
-Jaylynn

[Cierra]

I appreciate the feedback! I see what you mean, though and I completely agree. I did kind of jump into giving away a lot of information. I'll be sure to keep that in mind for future stories and parts to this one! :)

Thank you!

[speckledbyrd]

I like this a lot...anything to do with supernatural/angel stuff is super intriguing

[Cierra]

I'm glad you liked it! Be sure to stay tuned into my my profile because I'll be posting more parts! :)