As It Burned Brightly

Sometimes it takes everything and more to fix a broken love.

Don't look me in the eyes

For you'll hate what you see

Suffocated by cellophane dreams

Just tell me once again

That we'll have just one more chance

And I promise that this time I'll do things right

 

I will tear this down and build it up again

 

Dear, let's just pretend

That our plastic hearts can't break

And maybe we will see another day

Let's lose it all, let's take the fall

Lie down for a dream so small

The city lights will watch us as we sink into the night

 

Your hand brushes mine

A simple touch holds all your pain

In my heart I know there's nothing I could say

To make you just forget

Everything that we've been through

But I'll never make you feel this way again

 

I will tear this down and build it up again

 

Dear, let's just pretend

That our plastic hearts can't break

And maybe we will see another day

Let's lose it all, let's take the fall

Lie down for a dream so small

The city lights will watch us as we sink into the night

 

I know that we are breaking

Our hearts and hands are shaking

It's because of me that we are here

Dearest, dearest, don't lose hope

Someday I will fix what I have broke

 

Dear, let's just pretend

That our plastic hearts can't break

And maybe we will see another day

Let's lose it all, let's take the fall

Lie down for a dream so small

The city lights will watch us as we sink into the night

Author's Note

This is a song I wrote for the band I play in, and I would love some advice on how to improve the lyrics, rhythm, all of the different aspects. Thank you!

Reviews

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

Actually, I quite like this the way it is right now. I really adore this part,

"Dear, let's just pretend
That our plastic hearts can't break
And maybe we will see another day
Let's lose it all, let's take the fall
Lie down for a dream so small
The city lights will watch us as we sink into the night"