The Art of Concealment

Veiled windows, locked doors,

Memories turned rock-cold,

Granite galleries of my own,

Deeper dungeons in my soul.

 

Loathe me not, for this stoic fort,

Curse me not, for this farewell note,

This to myself that I’ve taught,

O’er the years I’ve failed and fought.

 

To un-feel, forever conceal,

Curb sentiment beneath a seal,

Not to wait for time to heal,

Nor bleed on the battle field.

Author's Note

I was inspired by Frozen

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I had bad luck with women. They were in bad places and liked the place they were in.
"Not to wait for time to heal,
Nor bleed on the battle field. "
It is sad when we fall down and give in to sadness and loss. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[TheLostMind]

I found this poem to be both kinda funny as well as astonishingly meaningful. Again, I loved the philosophical touch here.. The wordplay here is exquisite.. I loved your choice of words..

"Veiled windows, locked doors,
Memories turned rock-cold,
Granite galleries of my own,
Deeper dungeons in my soul." - I find these lines to be quite funny because well... Memories can turn rock cold but once in a while they come (right) back to life.. They are like these partially healed wounds - a little scratch can ruin everything and bring that searing pain back. Being an introvert, I can totally relate to the last two lines of this stanza. I love solitude. I love life as it is - accepting what it brings. We love solitude because it gives us peace. I don't wonder about love.. I don't wonder about the s**t life throws at us because I want to remain oblivious to it.. safe in my own mind.. Away from reality...

"Loathe me not, for this stoic fort,
Curse me not, for this farewell note,
This to myself that I’ve taught,
O’er the years I’ve failed and fought. " - A stoic fort?.. Can we really turn our hearts to stone?. I don't think so.. "failed and fought"?.. I don't believe in failures.. I don't believe in failures because I think this whole frigging game (life) is rigged. Everybody is meant to lose in the end. :P

"To un-feel, forever conceal,
Curb sentiment beneath a seal,
Not to wait for time to heal,
Nor bleed on the battle field." - "un-feel"?. We are only human. We cannot act like those wax figures in Madame Tussauds. We cannot conceal our feelings without hurting ourselves pretty badly. You will have to wait for time to heal the wounds.. Not-waiting is not an option ma'am.. We all are bound to bleed in the battle field.. We all will lose.. Guess why?.. This game is rigged :P

[Isabel25]

Such a lengthy review! my goodness!!
YES! I have often felt that this whole game is rigged and that none of us will ever win. Just trying to get some thoughts out Mr.Lostmind. I am just another contestant who has lost her way and is moving in circles. Bear with me please :)

Thank you for the wonderful review. I guess you believe in quantity as well as quality based on your reviews.

[TheLostMind]

"Lengthy review" ?. Ouch! that hurt.. :P.. Well, we all are running in a never-ending circle... "I guess you believe in quantity as well as quality based on your reviews." --> I believe good poems deserve more than a "a really good write".. It's just like saying - "Look I am here because you stopped by my poem the other day". :P

[Isabel25]

I wasn't finding fault silly! I was surprised that u actually took out the time and energy to type that much. ...and ohkay...i'll keep that in mind the next time i review your works. :P

[TheLostMind]

Keep what in mind?

[Isabel25]

That u don't line one line reviews

[TheLostMind]

*like :P.....

[Isabel25]

whooops! *like* :D

[ANTO]

There seems a mis-match in the language style of the first stanza compared with the other two A.I.
The first seems modern and the others olde worlde.
The title caught my eye - good choice.
If the heart isnt out there then it can't be a target.
Cool write.
:)

[Isabel25]

It does? I never noticed. Thank u for pointing it out :)

[ANTO]

e.g. In the the first stanza I might have expected to read - this is just rough...
Granite galleries of memories, rock cold in mine own soul's dungeons keep - that type of thing

[ali]

my whole existence in a poem. I love your works!

[Isabel25]

I am honoured Ax. :) thank you very very much :)

[prajakta]

Wow,Annie!amazing write..:)..and again great language!could totally relate..:)

[Isabel25]

Thanx a ton Prajakta :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i haven't seen it either...but no matter...i get where we just freeze our heart so solid it becomes impenetrable...

we refuse to thaw because we know we might bleed, and won't allow ourselves to do that.

[Isabel25]

Yes...I couldn't agree more. You don't have to see the movie..nobody does, for everyone must have gone through this situation atleast once in their lifetime. Thank you for stopping by.

[dan]

Annie, This may be the best one of yours that I've had the pleasure of reading. I don't normally quote poems in my review (I prefer to rate the entire piece as one entity) but these words stood out for me: "Granite galleries of my own, Deeper dungeons in my soul." I'm saving this one to my library. Thank you for sharing with us. take care...dan

[Isabel25]

Oh thank you so much Dan :) This comment really made my day :)

[Abilash Uttama]

Amazing! once again i could totally relate to it. I too believe the more you endure alone, the stronger you get. It's worthless to show your wounds to others, your loved ones will be sad and your haters will be glad and you don't want any of this to happen but then there are some wounds which are lethal, which time alone can't heal.
your poem reminded me of 'Bluebird' by 'Charles Bukowski'.

[Isabel25]

Thank you Abhi :) I will definitely check that poem out. And I know u would totally relate to this, as u too have gone through a lot. It is good to let out the steam in this productive way rather than reducing the salt content in our bodies.

[Abilash Uttama]

true... and here is the link : https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=lyMS4qJ8NXU

[Isabel25]

Saw it..heard it...made me tear up a little bit. Thank you for telling me about this one :D

[Abilash Uttama]

This is one of my favorite poem so I felt like sharing it, I even experimented with it.

[Isabel25]

where? show me!

[Abilash Uttama]

there's a bluebird in my heart that
wants to get out
but I'm too clever, I only let him out
at night sometimes
when everybody's asleep.
I say, I know that you're there,
so don't be
sad.
then I put him back,
but he's singing a little
in there, I haven't quite let him
die
and we sleep together like
that
with our
secret pact
But sometimes he asks why?
He knows
I too feel sad to deny its existence
to pretend his absence
But I won't expose him
even for a while
Because the world I know
breaks down fragile
Though it's nice enough
to make a man weep
but I don't
weep, do
you?

[Isabel25]

Ohhh.....thats good...really good :)

[Abilash Uttama]

Sometimes i do this, i have extended two poems of shadow poet 'don't cry my dear' and 'forget who i am', check them out whenever you are free.

[Isabel25]

I will, I will.

[Stonz P.]

I may not get the references as I have not seen the movie..

"Deeper dungeons in my soul"
This is a line I like and relate to the most..

It is strange that the hollower we get the more space we begin to fill with our secrets.. Makes me wonder whether it is a good thing or not.. but I guess to be with oneself is good..

[Isabel25]

I think it is better than confiding in others anyway. Cos most of them never understand what u r going through.

[Stonz P.]

*sigh* Couldn't agree more...

[Isabel25]

Yes, I know u would agree. You too doesn't seem like someone who would go and open up to people.

[Stonz P.]

:P I'm a new onion for ev1..

[Isabel25]

I like being an onion

[Stonz P.]

You make people cry? Tch tch.... :P

[Isabel25]

Nope..I mean I usually don't. But I ha layers and layers that need to be peeled off. Y am I explaining? You knew I meant this only.

[Stonz P.]

Hahaha...gotchyaaa.. :P

And please only an idiot would not like to make IDIOTS cry...

[Isabel25]

true that..