The Wall

For years now, I have been at it.

Building this wall, brick by brick

Cemented, strengthened;

With hurt and heartbreak,

Shame, regret, hatred,

 

Out of nowhere you come,

And bulldoze it down,

When you don’t even plan to stay,

Years of toil crumbling in seconds.

 

Maybe it’s not your fault,

Maybe my wall needed more bricks,

More hate, hurt and tears.

 

Maybe I’ll mould it out of iron this time.

Or maybe, just maybe-

I would stop building walls,...

 

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem told the truth. We will built wall of safety. The wall is a two-sided coin. Keep love out and also leave us standing alone.
"Maybe it’s not your fault,
Maybe my wall needed more bricks,
More hate, hurt and tears."
All of us need to read the ending your wrote. Forgive ourselves and the person who broke our heart. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[ali]

This is basically how life works. Build walls around you until some random who knock it down. Then they leave. And you'd start to build the walls again. And the cycle continues until that one person who intends to stay.

This is really great Annie. As always! :)

[Isabel25]

Very true A.X...happy to see that you visited :)

[Adam Adams]

Building this wall, brick by brick
Cemented, strengthened;
With hurt and heartbreak,
Shame, regret, hatred ...

Very deep and powerful starting of the write. I must say, you chose very attractive words to lit the fire to your poetic-page. Your poetry makes me thinking that love gives the heart a way to breathe along, but at the same time, it steals even an every folio of freedom off its beats... to make life 'Numbed' (Your poem - "Tired"). Liked the mixture of diff. diff. words. Great job.

[TheLostMind]

You did build a wall strong enough to hold off a thousand men.. But then again, there is a secret door on the northern side, some people ca still find that door and get in :P.

I don't think he "bulldozed" it.. He simply found a way in (remember the secret door I was talking about?). .. If the wall was really bulldozed then any moron would have been able to enter now..

"For years now, I have been at it.
Building this wall, brick by brick
Cemented, strengthened;
With hurt and heartbreak,
Shame, regret, hatred," - We can never really turn our feelings off. We are only human we are bound to fall for people.. What happens later is a totally different story (THE GAME IS RIGGED :P)..

"Maybe I’ll mould it out of iron this time.
Or maybe, just maybe-" -- Maybe you should let your guard down and see where that takes you.. You can mould it with iron, yet, the door remains unguarded.. Life is too short.. Don't waste it building walls that don't serve the purpose :P.

Another thought-provoking write. Good job. :)

[Isabel25]

You give seriously insightful comments. Your name should be "Foundmind" instead of "lostmind". Let me see, maybe it is time to let my guard down...i'll see where that would take me.

[TheLostMind]

You can't find something unless it's lost :P. I have completed phase-1 (losing mind).. Again, not my area of expertise.. anyways.. I think there is no point in creating fences / walls and hiding behind them.. Let your guard down and see where that takes you.. Even if you fail, you would have tried.. and that's what matters :)

[Isabel25]

Thanks LM. For your time and wisdom :)

[TheLostMind]

You are welcome :)..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i can relate to this poem....except after three marriages and other breaks...those walls are really strong---protection plan, but with high rates of insurance----not being able to fully feel...life makes us smarter, but then that isn't always such a good thing.

[Isabel25]

It may not be such a good thing, but not completely a bad thing too. I pity those who have never felt pain, betrayal or heartbreak- they are so crude, unaware of what life could teach them. Thank you Jacob, for stopping by.

[Stonz P.]

I loved it only until the last line which broke my flow. Maybe it is just me as I pay attention to flow. I feel you could work on it and make this whole.
Nonethless, it is another good portrayal of the darkest days one faces.
Another good write.

[Isabel25]

I will definitely work on it...Thank you once again. :)

[Stonz P.]

If that change is a Floyd reference, I have immense respect for you.
The poem is phenomenal now.
Bravo.

[Isabel25]

I don't listen to Pink Floyd...would that reduce the respect?

[Stonz P.]

Well at least you get Pink Floyd from Floyd; you have more respect than my friends can manage :P

[Isabel25]

I think I can live with that for now :p

[Abilash Uttama]

very well written, i liked this analogy of wall. it's true we can't blame anyone for breaking our heart and these type of experiences are essential as they make us strong :)

on other note: it was quite informative as now i know it will take more efforts from my side if i have to win heart of a heart-broken girl. thanks ;)

[Isabel25]

Always happy to help IIT guy! And thank u :D

[Abilash Uttama]

well my name is abilash :P

[Isabel25]

I like this pseudonym better

[Abilash Uttama]

i'll prefer my name over this pseudonym but it's all up to you anyways whenever you are free read 'part of me' it's on similar theme and i believe you'll like it :)

[wordman]

we build walls when we`re hurt but we hope someone will come along and tear it down
an emotional write

[Isabel25]

But we have to start from brick one if it is the wrong person who comes along... :/

[wordman]

so you have to be smart lol

[Isabel25]

I'll keep that in mind Wordman :)

[Terpsichore]

All walls come tumbling down, it's a strong foundation that matters. T

[Isabel25]

I most certainly agree..