Wow. You really are nitty and gritty, Flash frontline news. You speak the truth.. Loud and out theirs. I like that a whole lot. no bullshit. Just facts. Dramatic, dark, scary. And real to live as you can get. Without even having to leave your front door.
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thanks, Dee. I'm glad you liked it.
6 Years Ago
My pleasure and thank you for making us all think!
hey still think this is fantastic i read again for another of my comps, good luck!
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6 Years Ago
Thanks, Julie. This is a first for me - I have never had the same person review the same poem twice .. read moreThanks, Julie. This is a first for me - I have never had the same person review the same poem twice before! I feel very flattered.
I, too, mourn the passing of NORMALCY. It saddens me that my grandchildren cannot live the sort of childhood I enjoyed in the Nifty Fifties.
Not a pretty subject, but well handled!
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Angel. To quote an old song - 'The trouble with normal is, it always gets worse.'
True fact. Some people just like fire.
We're definitely living in an angry world now, though that could be me watching the football.
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6 Years Ago
Ah, a soccer hooligan, eh? :)
Yes, the world seems to get angrier with every passing.. read moreAh, a soccer hooligan, eh? :)
Yes, the world seems to get angrier with every passing year. Sad, innit?
your author's note is spot on as your poem is...sometimes a ice cold slap in the face is the best medicine eh!? all true ... we can stop it ... we do have power over chaos ... we all know how .. we just think winning elections is more important than doing it ... support law enforcement, civil rights (God given says our Bill of Rights and Constitution) education, businesses ... support the family and life ... be accountable etc. etc ... but the weakness of our Capitalist system is greed ... seems no one is immune to it :(((( great stuff sir! your poem has shaken me out of me little dream world
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Thank you, Noodle Soup. I agree with your sentiments completely. But keep your little dream world in.. read moreThank you, Noodle Soup. I agree with your sentiments completely. But keep your little dream world intact; it is important to have somewhere nice to escape to!
6 Years Ago
you know ....i am blessed beyond my dreams in my retirement ... a forest of cedar, pines and oaks su.. read moreyou know ....i am blessed beyond my dreams in my retirement ... a forest of cedar, pines and oaks surrounds me ... in full bloom i can not see the cabins in the hood ... not rich by any means .. but dreams do come true my friend ... God bless!
6 Years Ago
I know what you mean. I live amongst hemlocks, birches and pines beside a beautiful lake, so I under.. read moreI know what you mean. I live amongst hemlocks, birches and pines beside a beautiful lake, so I understand your love of your environment very well, my friend. Bon chance!
I could kiss you for this. That last line is what it's all about (even tho your many examples are well-chosen & well-expressed). So many ranting commentaries neglect to realize the crazymakers just wanna troll us. I've stayed away from political commentary becuz I don't want to feed the monster our solicited outrage, but your poem is truly an exception to the current deafening noise. Your message sums everything up with delicious honesty clothed in sardonic tone (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie
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6 Years Ago
Wow! Thank you, Margie. Your reviews are always a work of art in themselves. And you are absolutely .. read moreWow! Thank you, Margie. Your reviews are always a work of art in themselves. And you are absolutely right - the last line is what it is all about. It's a sad commentary on our society, but unfortunately, in my opinion, so very true.
The truth is often hard to look at, but you've made it riveting with this piece.
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6 Years Ago
Thank you, Travis. It's good to hear from you again. Enjoying your summer?
6 Years Ago
As much as I can.. summers have been a bit difficult to enjoy in recent years. I'm trying to keep my.. read moreAs much as I can.. summers have been a bit difficult to enjoy in recent years. I'm trying to keep my head in a notebook, its progress for me.
How about yourself, brother?
6 Years Ago
Sorry to hear things have been difficult, my friend.
Temperatures have been far too high for .. read moreSorry to hear things have been difficult, my friend.
Temperatures have been far too high for me, can't take the heat, but apart from that, yes, my summer has been good. Just waiting for things to cool down now!
Aspiring new writer. I enjoy writing stories, poems and song lyrics. In fact most of my poems are song lyrics! All constructive input is welcome. If you think something sucks, tell me so. I won't be o.. more..