Good use of rhyme & rhythm . . . the staccato march of this message gives the sense of time marching on. It sounds very detached from any sense of imagery or emotion, nothing lyrical, just the stark facts (in a good way). Even tho you're conveying a common message, you've made it uncommon with your word choices & stark examples from real life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thanks again, Margie. I am pleased that you picked up on that - it was meant to be a clinical observ.. read moreThanks again, Margie. I am pleased that you picked up on that - it was meant to be a clinical observation of a sad fact. I love your reviews, my friend.
Ooooo... potent and well said. Your phrasing, timing and word choice is just out of this word. I am still and shall always remain your biggest fan and most envious friend.
"Glossy, glittering glamour,
Strolls across the stage,
Seeking spotlit sexiness,
Defying advancing age."
Yeah - I so get that. Even those of us who don't earn our livings on the magazine covers are guilty of this. Guilty as charged. The price of chasing youth and beauty is steep, exhausting, expensive....but, for that one look every once in a while..... guilty again, it's intoxicating, it's addictive and when a stranger smiles at you and holds his gaze until you turn the corner....... worth it.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much, PL. It's good to hear from you again, my lovely friend. I am glad you liked it, a.. read moreThank you so much, PL. It's good to hear from you again, my lovely friend. I am glad you liked it, and your point is well made. I love the way you ladies beautify our lives and appreciate the efort you put into it. Much appreciated.
...and I am still your biggest fan, too!
Good use of rhyme & rhythm . . . the staccato march of this message gives the sense of time marching on. It sounds very detached from any sense of imagery or emotion, nothing lyrical, just the stark facts (in a good way). Even tho you're conveying a common message, you've made it uncommon with your word choices & stark examples from real life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thanks again, Margie. I am pleased that you picked up on that - it was meant to be a clinical observ.. read moreThanks again, Margie. I am pleased that you picked up on that - it was meant to be a clinical observation of a sad fact. I love your reviews, my friend.
Aspiring new writer. I enjoy writing stories, poems and song lyrics. In fact most of my poems are song lyrics! All constructive input is welcome. If you think something sucks, tell me so. I won't be o.. more..