Okay, but the last stanza is actually perfection.
This poem is easy to digest while containing some lovely phrasing such as "gilded distance." The Call of the Wild reminds me of the same named book; I wonder, if you've read it? I think probably, but anyway, I agree that nature is very healing. It also makes us humble as we truly are just a speck in the lifetime of the world, or even simply, of our surroundings in this current world.
Thank you, Chryiss. If you are referring to the Jack London book 'Call of the Wild', yes, I have rea.. read moreThank you, Chryiss. If you are referring to the Jack London book 'Call of the Wild', yes, I have read it, but it was back when I was bout twelve years old, which was a long time ago!
5 Years Ago
You're welcome~ Yes, I was referring to Jack London, and I read it a long time ago, too. Although, I.. read moreYou're welcome~ Yes, I was referring to Jack London, and I read it a long time ago, too. Although, I don't remember all the details, I remember having liked it. This poem was a nice reminder of that feeling. ^^
Okay, but the last stanza is actually perfection.
This poem is easy to digest while containing some lovely phrasing such as "gilded distance." The Call of the Wild reminds me of the same named book; I wonder, if you've read it? I think probably, but anyway, I agree that nature is very healing. It also makes us humble as we truly are just a speck in the lifetime of the world, or even simply, of our surroundings in this current world.
Thank you, Chryiss. If you are referring to the Jack London book 'Call of the Wild', yes, I have rea.. read moreThank you, Chryiss. If you are referring to the Jack London book 'Call of the Wild', yes, I have read it, but it was back when I was bout twelve years old, which was a long time ago!
5 Years Ago
You're welcome~ Yes, I was referring to Jack London, and I read it a long time ago, too. Although, I.. read moreYou're welcome~ Yes, I was referring to Jack London, and I read it a long time ago, too. Although, I don't remember all the details, I remember having liked it. This poem was a nice reminder of that feeling. ^^
Wow! so beautiful,filled with truth as nature and the wild is always calling to our souls,if we would just let loose long enough to feel it.Love your poem;-]
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
Thank you, Weeping Willow. You are my favourite tree! :)
Great imagery, great musicality, simply outstanding!!
(Only thing I would say concerns the "its" in the last line....its presence merely renders "peace" an unnecessary repetition, which would sound better were it to be switched out for an "it". However, without "its", "peace" becomes its own entity that doesn't necessarily apply to the "peace" in the previous line, and thus is able to complement it with its sound without marring it with its meaning and reference point).
Thank you, emipoemi. And thank you again for the suggested change. I agree, it will work better and .. read moreThank you, emipoemi. And thank you again for the suggested change. I agree, it will work better and I will change it.
I used to prospect for gold in the Northern California and I could not wait for spring to "read" the rivers and then plan my summers to stay at whatever claim I could work. I miss the mountains....
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
That sounds like great fun! And I love mountains, too.
Nature can heal the illness of the souls if only we take time to go out and listen to it's magic. We are too connected to technology sometimes. Love the wording and the feel of this poem.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I couldn't agree more. Thank you, PB.
7 Years Ago
You are welcome. We all need to unplug unwind and relax more
Welp... I am convinced... Time to pack the backpack, allot time, and go get lost in the grime of the outdoors... Sooooo sick of the city... Thanks for bringing some of the green to me with your words... Well penned...
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
You're welcome, Silente. Enjoy your time in the great outdoors. Thanks for the kind words.
7 Years Ago
If I can ever get there... Hah... My pleasure, friend
City folks only hear noise. Breathe in fumes.
Fight over parking spaces. Yet twenty minutes drive out of most cities, you'll find countryside.
Most don't take advantage. Shame.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 2 people found this review constructive.
7 Years Ago
I have the advantage of living in the woods right next to a lake. Every time I go into town I can't .. read moreI have the advantage of living in the woods right next to a lake. Every time I go into town I can't wait to get back!
Aspiring new writer. I enjoy writing stories, poems and song lyrics. In fact most of my poems are song lyrics! All constructive input is welcome. If you think something sucks, tell me so. I won't be o.. more..