The Graveyard Shift

A romp in the graveyard at night.

Stumbling through the graveyard at night,

A bottle in my hand,

I tumble over a headstone

And hit my head hard when I land.

Staggering to my feet, I see a woman,

Champagne glass in her hand,

“Do you need some help?” she asked,

“It seems you can hardly stand.”

“No, I'm fine, really” I said,

“I'm just a little dazed.”

“That's alright then,” the lady replied,

“I'm just a little crazed!”

“Come,” she said, with a seductive smile,

“Let's have ourselves a party.”

“Now you're talking,” I answered back,

“I can party hearty.”

“I like to dance,” she hinted

With a stunning smile.

“Me too,” I said, “I'll hum some music

And we can dance a while.”

She moved in close and so did I,

As into my arms I drew her,

But it didn't quite work that way,

My arms just passed right through her!

Jumping back in fright I tripped again,

Falling back onto the ground.

“My God, you're a ghost!” I gasped.

“Yes,” she replied, “There's a lot of it going around.”

“I must have drunk more than I thought,

This just cannot be real,” I said.

“Oh yes, it can,” the woman replied,

“This is what happens to you when you're dead.”

© 2017 The Iron Horseman

Reviews

[C. Lee Battaglia]

(Jumping back in fright I tripped again,
Falling back onto the ground.
“My God, you're a ghost!” I gasped.
“Yes,” she replied, “There's a lot of it going around.”)

I was oddly in love with this poem. I thought that it was one of the best poems I have ever read.
I liked the story behind your poem and I thought that the flow was spot on!
Keep up the great work!

Your friend,

C. Lee Battaglia

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you, Lee. I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. It is one of my favorites. It still makes me laugh whenever I re-read it!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

well I laughed a great deal too. :)

[Jacob Clifford]

That twist! This poem has a good structure despite the whimsicality. This was very fun to read, and that twist is genuinely intriguing.

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you again, my friend. I am glad you liked this - it is one of my favourites!

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice ending to the poem. The good flow of thoughts led to logical ending. I liked the woman. Wanted dance and some company. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks, Coyote. I hope it gave you a laugh.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did and you are welcome.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Loved it another great work

[The Iron Horseman]

Wow, Julie, you have been busy! Thank you once more. :D

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

I read yours on train today

[Raj Sahu]

It's a chilling horror poem. I like the story you depicted in your work. You penned it with full of awesomeness. Keep writing. 😊

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you, Naj. Actually, it was intended to make you laugh, so I hope it worked! If you want something chilling try my poem Chills.

[Raj Sahu]

Okay, I will try. But it's Raj, not Naj. 😂

[The Iron Horseman]

Sorry, Raj. I will get it right from now on!

[Najam Us Saher]

I truly enjoyed reading this...It was simply amazing.

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you. I hope it gave you a good laugh!

[Najam Us Saher]

Yeah...You're welcome.

[Aeco]

Some of the rhyming seems a bit off but the story seems to compensate for some of these short-comings. Honestly the biggest thing to me, and this is more of a personal thing is that I would have liked it if you added... hmmm more complex words to the poem. And I mean it could be as simple as looking up synonyms for words you used and shifting some of the words, but what I'm getting at here is that I would like it if some of the words could be more "nuanced" in meaning. Some examples being; dead, dance, ghost, drunk. But other than that good poem.

[The Iron Horseman]

Thank you, I think. I would point out that the entire point of the piece is to be whimsical and straightforward. It is not meant to be Keats or Byron!

[Aeco]

Haha. That's true I guess the tone of the piece is as important as the contents. It is quite whimsical

[The Iron Horseman]

So give us a smile then! :D

[BBP]

Another awesome f*****g read! I really dig your style and the way you include the humor without losing the badass story lines and settings.

Loved it!

[The Iron Horseman]

Thanks. I am glad it gave you a laugh. You should check out 'Mermaids', one of my earlier poems. I think that might give you a chuckle, too.

[Poetic License]

LMAO - okay, okay, okay. I don't know if this "really" qualifies as my spooky poem - but it was so much fun that I nearly cackled my fool witch head off. I absolutely adored it. The cadence and tempo, the rhyme, it was all stylish and absurd and so much fun to read! Well done, my friend.

Two thumbs and large toes up!