The Birds Don't Know

A pantoum. I love repetitive poems :D

Birds fly off into the sky,
and plants continue to grow.
I have no tears left to cry:
Yesterday was long ago.

Plants continue to grow:
Life doesn't stop; it just goes on.
Yesterday was long ago--
and today is a new dawn.

Life won't stop; it will go on:
like I, can go on without you.
Just like the day's new dawn; 
My life can start anew.

I will go on without you, 
Unmindful of the pain.
This life I start anew,
Memories begin to wane.

Unmindful of my pain,
The birds fly to the sky.
The feelings start to wane--
and I have no tears left to cry.

Author's Note

Suggestions? :>

Reviews

[The Great Brain]

*smacks head against keyboard repeatedly*
How on earth do you manage to write like this?! I sit at my computer for hours trying to think of something, and you just crank amazing things out like nobody's business! Congratulations, you have succeeded in shaming one of the most self-centered people I know. Pardon me while I go to the closet to whimper.

[Legolas]

Well done:) I just love your poems:) wonderful job as usual:)

[R.O.M.E.T.S.I.]

I love this. I had a fight with my friend three weeks ago. We havn't talked since. I often go down to the park to get over myself, because I kind of miss him. I see the birds fly and the plants grow, despight whats going on in my head. I would pick a rew words more carefully, with more passion. I'm just saying that to give some sort of suggestion, because it awesome.

[K-mo]

this is a wonderful poem, very well done! My suggestion is to keep writing!!!

[Circe]

Excellent form, this is really impressive writing, particularly the message of moving forward emotionally from having lost someone, the words to give people strength and remind us that life keeps going naturally. Everything here is spot on, bravo.