sun rising

Keep me still, hold me

close, in your arms, until this

starless night is done.

Until the voices fade to

whispers with the rising sun.

Author's Note

A little tanka, it was originally a looooong poem, but I figured it would make more impact as a short poem. I wrote it in class. Huhu. I will be back, soon, to review people and read. No timey now.

Sort of inspired by a conversation I had some time ago with a friend.

Reviews

[J. J. Nightingale]

My kind of poem .. sweetly beautiful ..

Jazz :)

[Mz]

Big fan of short poems! It has more force 'cause you breathe it in so quickly or perhaps that is simply my short attention span speaking.

Beautiful.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Simple and beautiful. Such a lovely poem. Nice work!

[Alm]

Thank you! I'm happy you liked it. :)

[Lost in Wonderland]

No prob:)

[Tai Ryens]

Every word, once again, holds power. Wonderful job Alyssa, keep it up.

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I really enjoyed this, nicely expressed

[Legolas]

I loved this a lot. I haven't written many tanka's. This is great! There is a lot of comfort shown in this poem. Good job!

[Alm]

Thankuu! You write haikus, tankas should be easy for you :)

[Legolas]

Haha, I guess they should be:)