Work in progress

A little idea I'm working on

Torn lovers meet once every night
yet never as one in heavens sight

Orphillia  -

Hast thou no words of comfort now
to ease my troubled heart to rest
to take from me my fevered brow
and deep set ache of risen breast

My soul cries out for one as he
that from my sight is absent made
as futile need and want set free
in rivulets of tears cascade

For such am I of royal birth
of noble stock and silver spoon
and yet my heart attains not worth
when his and mine beat out of tune

....

Tacio

I dare not speak for fear she hears
the trembling of my muted tongue
that I wouldst taste those wasted tears
that from her eyes unjustly wrung

I beg the shadows let me hide
lest I were seen and thought unkind
watching her pain that wounds my pride
knowing that love is not so blind

For I a common fellow born
of lowly stock from country folk
am bound a bondsman here this morn
by words I am afraid unspoke

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Reviews

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

You take my breath away!!!
I beg the shadows let me hide lest I were seen and thought unkind watching her pain that wounds my pride knowing that love is not so blind.... Wow

[E.V. Black]

Shadow, only you could attempt Shakespearean style and succeed time and time again. I have attempted it more than once, but it feels exceedingly awkward when I do so. I've just lapsed into the traditional twentieth century style of writing. Surely nothing wrong with it for it feels right to me. Sometimes I envy you.

Regardless, I thought this was perfectly lovely. You've got the Shakespearean language down pat. I look forward to your continuation of this.