Playing Gentle On My Mind

Love can never die

Your shirt still lays crumbled
at the foot of last nights bed,
and my ears are still ringing
from the words that went unsaid.

Thr scent of sweat still lingers
in the creases where you slept,
and the pillow stained forever
by the secret tears you wept.

You swore you'd never leave me
and as long as I draw breath,
your love will still surround me
till we are joined once more in death.

Your passing but a moment
between morning kiss and sweet goodnight,
so until again you hold me
I hold your image close and tight.

Reviews

[November Gold]

Wow...gripping, emotional, intense. A very very good write!

[WhiteWillow]

A haunting, emotional write. Love this! The rythym and words are placed perfectly. Beautifully done!

[Priscilla Sayers]

Such a heartfelt poem and the tenderness felt is dear. I really like this. You may want to fix Thr to The though. Tiny typo. I have many so don't swweat it. It is a very nice poem.

[Andrea Vargas]

This is very lovely and meaningful.. Most people write of the giddy thoughts and fluffy warmth of romance your different approach is very refreshing (:

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

this makes me think of late night trysts with a former love. One you still have feelings for but know they are only passing through. Wonderfully penned...

[Cassie Fraga]

geeeeze... **sighs** that was on point with targeting sad emotion... awesome in that pen of yours!!
I love the last line... speaks so loud!
great work as always!!

[VelvetRosetta]

I like Daytonights words...mournful melodies, indeed, not even death can end love...Sadfully wonderful.

[Daytonight]

So poignant and tender. It plays across my heartstrings like a mournful melody. Keep on penning.

The beauty of this is it's that it's just a beautifully simple piece of recognizable writing, but with a great meaning. As usual superb!

[TWISTED NIGHTMARE]

amazing piece... great emotion and just a great write