The Bubble Dragons

Another attempt at childrens story telling

There is a land called Wash Rag Bay,
where the Bubble Dragons roam.
In search of sponge on which to lay,
and feast on shaving foam.

A cake of soap with toothpaste cream,
all sliced up on their plate.
Is more than they could wish or dream,
as they can hardly wait.

A jelly made from styling gel,
with mousse around the base.
For how they love the sight and smell,
and most of all the taste.

With gravy made from aftershave,
for roasted rubber duck.
A dish for which they often crave,
and beg for from their cook

The party now is in full swing,
with fun new games to play.
Like pass the parcel tied with string,
charades and Simon Say.

They danced in circles on the beach,
upon bath crystal sand.
there breathing deep the scent of peach,
in this their faery land.

The dinner bell rang out to say,
that it was time to eat.
And all the Dragons cried " Hurray,
this day cannot be beat ! "

With the Shampoo Cola flowing,
to toast the birthday girl.
As beneath the stars a-glowing,
we leave this special world.

Author's Note

Let me know honestly what you thought good or bad.

Reviews

[joshua deathdealer]

I'm re reading.. this is awesome stuff xx

[ATG]

This a very cute and entertaining poem. I think it would be a great poem to read to a very little kid. Overall it was written and amusing.

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

Oh wonderful. It's bathtime! :D
This made me smile a lot, because it just made me think of one of the bathrooms with bubbles floating around.
Very magical, and took me back to the time when bathtime was really fun (:
Danke for sharing

-Marie-

[Muse]

GOOD! I honestly prefer the darker deeper stuff, but I need a good smile every now and then. It made me think of my two kids....making mud pies....having tea parties during a bubble bath. You are well spoken with your penning. An easy and delightful read!

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ha ha another terrrific write..childrens poetry has to easy to read..and metered within an inch of it's life..children need the sing song in a poem and you have mastered that..delightful indeed..and a place I would visit!

[Becky C Strukamp]

Honestly, this was uplifting and yes very magical. Reminded me of "Puff the Magic Dragon who lived by the sea." You did an outstanding write here. The flow was excellent and it was such a charming, warm poem. Delightful to read and breathe in. All thoughts good!!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Oh! This is magical!

[joshua deathdealer]

Nice work. It's fun and light. Enjoyed.

[Baz]

Another little gem. Obviously in a similar style to the Lightbulb Moon poem, and equally excellent. One line seemed a bit out of place to me:

The dinner bell rang out to say,
that it was time to eat.
And all the Dragons cried " Hurray,
this day cannot be beat ! "

Given the fact that you need to find a word rhyming with "eat", I would have thought that the word "meat" was a more obvious choice. What about something like:

The dinner bell rang out to say,
that it was time to eat.
And all the Dragons cried " Hurray,
We dine on flannel meat!"

Or something like that. Just a thought. Great poem, nonetheless.

[Lily Mae]

It's light and fun and had my mind busy in thought all the way through.. :) xx