Unconventional Love

Just an out of the ordinary way of saying I love you

You're in my head, you're in my bed
and the moments inbetween,
you are my mask, my empty glass
my conscious thoughts and dreams.

You are my scars, my caviar
the bloodstain and the tears,
you are my ache, my first mistake
my mentor and my peers.

You're in my arms, my lucky charms
my corsage and my wreath,
you are my life, the hallmarked knife
my council and my brief.

You are my love, my push and shove
my seasons in the sun.
you are my death, my morning breath
my roulette and my gun.

You are the first, you are my hearse
my casket and my stone,
and so I say this special way
my heart is yours alone.

Author's Note

Be honest please

Based this on my favourite poet/song writer Leonard Cohen

Reviews

[dutch2lips]

brilliant, I can feel the music while reading, kudos!

[Madame]

love it! especially the second and the last stanzas

[francinebc]

I love the rhyming, it makes it so much easier to read.

Love it, it's so true aswell.

Beautifully written, well done. x

[WillowWhisper]

I love the way this shows the complexity of human relationships with such an easy transition. It's wonderful how it mixes the feelings of love hate and utter distaste in an attraction of one to another. It provides insight to human emotions and attractions. Loved it.

[Sukriti Suki]

This is very interesting to say the least....such love is very hard to find. I find the imagery and the comparisons very wonderful.

[pinkasylum]

Wow Shadow, you are an amazing poet, you dazzle me with each new piece I read. This piece is both poignant and amusing, and left with me a sense of your enduring love and breadth of years with your wife. Salute!

[KimLove "The Beautiful ..]

I love this very much, sounds like a very passionate realationship one that can be very loving and then at times implode upon itself. I think my favorite verse is:
You are my love, my push and shove
my seasons in the sun.
you are my death, my morning breath
my roulette and my gun.

Great write Shadow. xx