When The Sun Sinks

When the sun starts to sink,

My thoughts are so frantic I can barely think,

My heart starts to beat faster,

My head is filled with demonic laughter,

But I know from the way the demons rhyme,

That the voice inside my head is mine,

Fear sometimes keeps me awake,

When I hear a noise in the dark I start to quake,

I always hear there warning,

That if I go to sleep I wouldn't wake up in the morning,

There's so many ways to die,

Just thinking of them all I want to hide and cry,

You could die in your sleep,

You could die counting sheep,

You could die by a spider,

Or by a viper,

About all of this I think,

When the sun starts to sin.

Reviews

[Angel of the devil]

this is beautiful, I hope you are okay.
it is so beautiful..............and...................sad...........

[Dead]

Yeah lol....

[Angel of the devil]

good....
I feel like I can't type today, I keep misspelling words today.
how are you today?

[Blackheart]

Really beautiful to be honest. Last few lines imply the essence that the person is interested in death. You have portrayed these emotions amazingly. Just a little glitch at the 9th line where it should be *their instead of there.

[Dead]

And I'm talking about me...

[Blackheart]

Believe me. I was very interested in death too. Still am, perhaps.

[Dead]

Maybe we can help each other... You know poet to poet

[Blackheart]

Yes we can. I would be happy to help anyone in whatever way I can. :)

[Hope Rose]

This is a great battle between knowing what's right and the voices inside the heads of people with depression and PTSD. Maybe even people who don't have it, I don't know honestly. Great job, and keep it up.
Shadow

[Dead]

well you know I don't have PTSD lol i made it about me

[Hope Rose]

lol i know but i'm saying people with PTSD are the same way

[jesserose99]

a great tale of fear and it's battle with the mind. Nice work.

[Dead]

thank you .

[Carbon Muse]

Nicely written,

I can't relate to the topic as I am on the flip-side, actively inviting it rather than fearing it. Yet, it gives a tantalizing glimpse into the heart of those gripped in it's fear.

One thing I noticed, on the last line, should it not be "When the sun starts to sink" or is it an intentional note on how darkness brings sin ...

[Dead]

Thank you .