I just said HI

I remember when you said HI

Wasn't it Good-Bye?

Was it a lie?

 It was just another guy

A happy message in the morning

Long talks during the night 

Then it became boring 

Were you exploring?

I know you just said Hi 

It was better when you didn't try 

When i never knew you

When there wasn't a 'we' 

When it was just me 

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This poem reminds me of a shirt that someone pulled off & it became inside-out in the process. Your poem starts on the way in to this relationship & ends on the way out. I especially love the last stanza which feels like a backing away from something one wishes one had never gotten involved in . . . such a universal feeling! For some, relationships go on & on in a steady way . . . for others, it can feel just like this, trying on, casting off! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Intothemilkyway]

I think the same. But how would we grow if we don't experience such things.
Life is a long journey filled with such random beautiful things.
We got to enjoy everything.

'Hugs to you too''

[barleygirl]

I hear ya! Every time I feel disillusioned, I want to hole up & go full-bore loner, but then I always tell myself just what you said . . . it's all about experiencing life & growing!

[Zeden]

Reading this I feel like Im shearing my pain with you😌

[Intothemilkyway]

Interesting.

[emmajoy]

' A happy message in the morning - Long talks during the night - Then it became boring - Were you exploring? '

Not sure if I should have but, I smiled through this because it reminded me of a song, maybe c and w. that couldn't decide on its rhythm: bouncy or = slow and mewed! As for your lyrics, they heel-toe with almost gay abandon yet.. have that aura that says: Ouch!

[Intothemilkyway]

Thank you so much for your review. Enjoyed reading this humorous comparison.

[emmajoy]

Hope you didn't think my words were negative cos they weren't - perhaps i was in a happier mood than recent.. and didn't understand the upset, the hurt you might have been feeling. If so, forgive me, please.

[Intothemilkyway]

Ah no no . I loved your review. I love how you interpreted it and how you put a humorous comparison. I love things like that.

[emmajoy]

Thank goodness... can leave smiling. Smile too, please.

[Coyote Poetry]

The we, the me. Places we decide to be. New world, people are rarely showing real face. A lie, the truth. Maybe we decide. Hello my friend and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Intothemilkyway]

And thank you my dear friend for your kind review.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear poet.

[pinhead07]

Nicely written.
This reminds me of someone, heck it probably reminds everyone of someone. It ended in the same way. She probably started exploring and it got boring for her. Our lives would be better if we never met anyone like that. But what can one do except move on. Or try to. That’s how relationships are, sometimes they work, sometimes they don’t. The ones that don’t, always leave scars. You're right though, that is how we grow. :))

[Intothemilkyway]

indeed so my dear friend.

[Chris Shaw]

I sense some disappointment here in the way things turned out. Always difficult when one party wants more than the other is prepared to give. Universal theme. Nicely related. All good wishes.

Chris

[Intothemilkyway]

Thank you Chris. It is disappointing but it's also a good memory and lesson overall.

[Lox]

Simple and compact poem of tragic modern love. Although it bothers me that the last stanza had 1 line more than the previous ones, overall a great read. Keep up the good work!

[Intothemilkyway]

That's so funny.
You got to be used to it.
I only write free verse. It's my style.
read moreThat's so funny.
You got to be used to it.
I only write free verse. It's my style.
I have a certain way of writing my poems.

Thank you for your beautiful review

[Lox]

Sorry I wasn't trying to be funny nor offend you in anyway. We are both free to write however we want and give opinions as such. Again, sorry

[Unspoken poet]

heart tugging write here, very nicely written and expressed

[Intothemilkyway]

Indeed so. Thank you for reviewing it.