Ten Years From Now

You don't know what you do ta me

I don't think you ever did

 

You don't care how far I've fallen

As long as I catch you in the end

 

You don't want ta see me fighting

For all that I have gained

 

Because it takes me away from you

Does it make you feel ashamed?

 

You need someone ta need you

And I was always it

 

But my heart is sore from fighting

And mean is all I have ta give

 

You made me what I am today

A dark defensive wall

 

Because the love I had ta give to you

You took advantage of

 

Will it be this way 10 years from now?

Will I still feel the same?

 

Or will I finally be free of you?

Just a picture in a frame

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Strong bulleted thoughts here. Well penned. It reminds me of a line from a Stevie Nicks bit "how will we feel a generation from now?" and here we are a generation from when that song was written.
There is a lyrical quality to this piece...perhaps that's why i was reminded of a song.

[Janice Ann]

Well, I think your point is across, and if it isn't well they need to reread this! Great piece dear. As always.

Janice

[Nyida Strong]

Well done, once again. The rhythm you had going faltered just a little near the end, but the power of the piece maintained. Powerful, and I hope she's reading this.

N. Strong

[Colleen C Dunphy]

I like the push and pull of the relationship.
I totally can relate to the in 10 years line, there are some people that just effect you and no matter what happens and how much time goes by they still effect you.

[Crazy Cat Man]

Oh what a great poem. I can relate to this poem becuz I still feel in love with my ex from college. Unfortunately I couldn't find anyone to replace her...so the love is still there :P.....its hard......but thats life. I wonder how I'll feel 10 years later. Great piece. I hope u heal.

[Joshua Donahue]

i really enjoyed this. very emotional and gripping. i felt it all! :)

[Nefyrion]

smash em tell em don't play games put it on the line if they can't handle the heat don't start the fire