The Darkness

Loving her’s like poison

Burning in my soul

Broken down and bleeding

As I throw her to the floor

 

I wanted her to see me

Accept me as I am

But I was always second best beneath her self-righteousness

 

I’m wanting her to suffer

To feel what I have felt

So maybe she will understand

The cards that she had dealt

 

Let crystal hearts be shattered

With bloody battered fists

Bitter hate and jealousy controlling all I am

 

All she sees is who she is

But she’s not what she thinks

The darkness is inside us both

I just set it free

Reviews

[Jason Shadows]

The Devil Within (Diabolis Interium) That Control's The Darkness. Remain In The Past To See A Better Future For You Can Learn More From This Person As You Move On In The Present For This Person Can Reflect On The Things Your Looking For In Another. Things To See And Move To The Side For If You See These Again Then You Know The Next One Is The Same So Keep Searching Within The Dark And When The Cold Moves With You At Your Side Then You Can Feel Better When You Finally Meet The Right One. You Are Better Than This Person And Your Heart Tells You To Leave This One Alone. Hard To Do But Ive Been There. It Hurts But We Must Move On Hun. Just Take Your Time. I Like This One.

[NightShade]

Now, here is a dazzling gem of darkness that I think highly relatable. It's one hell of a theme, loaded with intense emotion and I dare say, it reminds me of something I've seen between a couple characters on my favourite show on television. Thing is, this is obviously spot on for life and not for viewing by stranger. Exquisite.

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Woo hoo! This is great. Thick in emotion and honesty. It's good you set that darkness free, because no one deserves to feel that! I have been there, and it just eats away at your soul. nice job.

[DamienHino]

good poem. i enjoyed it

[the in between]

Very insightful :) two thumbs up. I feel sorry for the narrator.

[Angel's Lady]

So maybe she will understand
The cards that she had dealt --- Honey, she will never get it. She was never one of 'us'...and she'll always be one of 'them'. A breeder. How could she possibly understand true love when she was only ever make believe in the first place?

[Nefyrion]

Looks a lot better in this format than in text form :P. But still has the same powerful effect I'm glad I'm not her :). I got your back keep it up your doing great and I know you know what I mean

[Nyida Strong]

Very well done! The force and power in this piece is one for the books. Keep up the passion, power, and intensity.

N. Strong

[Quaddeth]

Nice read, well constructed.