Summary

This is simply a summary of my short story.

Over twenty years ago, Conley had fallen into a coma. He and Elle had fought side by side, bringing the lost magical souls to the ‘other side’. Magical souls couldn’t just carry to a resting place; they needed to be brought there. After a mysterious blast of magic, Conley fell into a coma. Elle had spent years trying to figure out where the blast had come from, but nothing came from her research. In the magical world, nothing like it had been reported.

 

He was taken to a mortal hospital, with hopes of him waking in a short amount of time. But there was no such luck. He was then taken to the Hospice Hospital; a magical hospital in Los Angeles. For the last twenty years he had been cared for by the hospital, and not much had changed.

 

Except now, Bryan had injected him with an angelic hormone; vapomine. It was used to execute angels in the dark ages. It was also used to bring them out of comas, but there had never been a successful case that didn’t involve death.

 

A story filled with anger, love, fierce fights, magic, and more. 

Author's Note

Thanks much, J. Ghalden for your review and helpful corrections. :D I look forward to anything else you have to offer.

Reviews

[J. Ghalden]

You asked for Grammar and anything helpful so I'll try my best to be a grammar nazi. xD
He was then taken to the Hospice Hospital; it was a magical being hospital in Los Angeles -- These could actually be used as two separate sentences. If you want to make use of the semi-colon, I would shorten the second part by taking out 'it was' then it would work.
Except for now; Bryan had injected...-- The semi-colon should be a comma. Try not to overuse the semi-colon and its awesome powers! :P
Sounds like an interesting story. Looking forward to reading it :)

[The Shadow of the Dawn]

this is really good it really set the tone for the story and if the rest of the story is as good as this, then i can't wait to read it

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Great summary! Love the plot and am eager to read more!

[KAREN]

This sounds like it's going to be full of entertainment. Great plot!

[InterijentoWrites]

This book is currently in progress. I will always be adding more pages. I appreciate anything you have to offer as far as critique.