Garden

obsession? true love? desire for control vs forever bliss... you decide.

I wish I knew

where the garden grew

that would bring you

through my door.

There would be sights

and scents galore

colors and sounds

 magical allure.

You would be held

you would be set free

your silence felled

your heart given

to me.

Reviews

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

This is quite the romantic poem. That last stanza sounds like love to me. Nicely done, my friend.

[Mark]

Thanks sweets :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

you would be held you would be set free..........I love this........don't squeeze me so tightly I can't breathe........just hold me gently then let me go.......I will come back to you. lovely

[Dr. Wood ?]

quite magical in parts....Don't take this the wrong way because I am only trying to help, but a few of the rhymes seemed a little forced. The problem with rhyming poetry is that it is so hard to get it to flow......Brilliant conception though, all the same

[Mark]

Thank you Dr Wood. I know I forced a word or two, I dashed this off in about 10 minutes and keep reminding myself to come back to it and fix things. So far, I've been avoiding. :)