Thunder in the Rain

We humans always associate strong emotions with strong weather events.

Higher they loom,

the dark clouds sing

of foretold doom;

and the rains bring.

Cloud darkness hides

the forever blue.

The Earth abides

this lightning brew.

There is thunder,

in the rain.

I can't help wonder

who's to blame.

I keep trying

to go away

I keep flying

to another day.

I lost the fire

when I went away

lightning spired

into the clay.

There is thunder 

in the rain.

who will wonder

about my pain?

There is thunder

in the rain.

I won't wonder

who's to blame.

There is thunder...

in the rain.

Reviews

[Kimmie]

I actually love the rain and thunder, I love watching the lightening and hearing the thunder... It seems to block the world out for a few minutes...

[Mark]

Yes it does. Like the world stops in respect for a bit. Thanks

[Frieda P]

Perhaps Adele could set fire to the rain with this one again...I happen to love thunder, it covers up all the other noise.

[Mark]

You're the first to mention that connection. Thunder is nice. Natural and powerful.

[Baby Ricochet]

This one's got a sing song thing going on. Give it a few chords and a chorus and you might get famous. But then you'd forget all about us lackeys on the WC.

[Mark]

Heh, if only I could write music. I"ve tried and it always turns out to sound like an existing song!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this poem reminds me much of credence..."who'll stop the rain" and "have you ever seen the rain"

"long as i remember, rain's been coming down, clouds of mystery falling, confusion on the ground"

and the way rain makes such a great metaphor for trouble and pain...

you do it so well here..what is looming over the horizon...usually some storm's a comin'...

jacob

[Mark]

Great song! I'm honored to make you think of it :)

[Justine]

First time I have read any of your poems. I like the writing style here, although I think the inclusion of a picture knocked the formatting out of place? "I lost the fire when I went away" is such a great line, full of emptiness within. Sometimes when we lose a part of ourselves, we become irrevocably altered and perhaps grieving for our own loss of self starts. For me, anyway. I enjoyed reading this. Justine

[Mark]

Thanks for reading. I don't think the format was knocked out, the picture was put at the bottom. :)

[Justine]

must be my iPad :(

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This one had a great tempo and rhythm. There is a lyrical quality to this one that made the reading feel almost as though I was listening to someone else reading it. We do all keep trying...to escape something to find something, to free ourselves from something; the truth is that in the trying we are truly at our best I think. Well done.

[MOON]

Love the refrain , thunder in the rain, lovely lyrical write poignant too.

[icelandicblue]

There is thunder in the rain and it pelts us with memories and missed opportunities. This is powerful.

[Mark]

Thanks for reading ice. Always good to see your smiling avatar! :)

[Joyce S. Greene]

Very striking, Mark - no pun intended. You have made the analogy of rain and pain pivotal to the meaning of your poem. Excellent work!

[Mark]

Thanks for reading Joyce, I'll return the favor soon :)

[Jack...]

"keep writing, one day maybe you'll get better"????????? Not sure where that came from because to me it doesn't get much better than this Mark. Very cool my friend.

[Mark]

LOL Thanks Jack.