A Sparked Memory

I thought of you

when I heard a laugh.

A thought I hadn't had

in ...

How long?

It was a bitter tasting laugh;

Full of promises.

But, no longer connected,

it rolled away and left me

dry.

the more love I gave away,

the less it hurt.

Until there was no more you,

in me.

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

rolled away and left me dry. Powerful writing.

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

I really like this and the words are well chosen to make their point. It is like a finger drawing a line in the sand - this is where it stops! "Until there was no more you, in me!" Gone... This is powerful. It is amazing how a song or an old photo or even just a forgotten memory can bring back a whole bunch of sad feelings This is good.

[Stanley Wilson]

emotive and very poignant write enjoyed it

[Ayvid N]

There are those who just take and take and then there is nothing left in us at all. This great poem so superbly underlines that. Thank you so much for reminding us that we all need love to give love.

[Mark]

Heehee spanked monkey could make a good poem. Let me know when you write it! Thanks for the review.

[Brianna Brie]

Oh boy, my eyes are getting bad. I thought the title said a Spanked Monkey. lol

But, no longer connected,
it rolled away and left me
dry.

Great way to say it! Some days every where I go bits and pieces of people haunt me in a memory sparked.

[s y e]

Oh this is so poignant Son. Such emotions are stirred up in this poem, my sweet Mumma's boy. I loved this one.

[Mark]

Thank you Mummy! Glad you like. :)

[LadyAnn68]

OMG...very sad...such a few simple words left my eyes with tears.

[Mark]

Thank you for reading Ann :)

[LadyAnn68]

You are most welcome...my name is LadyAnn...just like it is seen and spelled this way as well...It is the name on my birth certificate. How have you been...I am going through allthe reading requests since I am back...need to catch up!

[Mark]

ahh. OKay LadyAnn. I thought it was an pen name! :)

[LadyAnn68]

No...lol hahaha it really is my name after Queen an Boleyn. It is also my professional name...I am an addiction psychologist.

[Pryde Foltz]

the more love I gave away,
the less it hurt.

Until there was no more you,
in me.

Absolutely, Mark. Feel the void left by another with love for others. Very wise write, my friend.

[Mark]

THanks so much Pryde. :)