Story

Sitting around while the cave light sang

old man gray in the beard

paints his pictures with a voice

practiced in the arts of creation.

"Once, far far away..."

The story; of filled lives

hope, glory, pain and despair

Rising above, held down

by evil and the darkness.

Triumph, revenge, 

forgiveness and yes, the crown jewel

of all....

Love.

The old man lowers his arms slowly

his audience enthralled

to tears, not at the emotions

he invoked,

but rather, that now it is ended;

sadness that the story is done.

Reviews

[Inder24]

Usually people are judged by the stories they tell . Their stories tell us about their personal struggles, pain, happiness and the meaning of life . I loved the part
"his audience enthralled
to tears, not at the emotions
he invoked,
but rather, that now it is ended;
sadness that the story is done.
" . A wonderful poem :)

[Mockingbird]

they seem innocuous but the old men have stories and wisdom to impart that can surprise us all. the more stories they tell the more we want to hear more and learn from him.

[Mark]

Story is definitely a universal Human thing! :) thanks for reading.

[Blue]

This has a magical quality, Mark. I felt so bad your poem has to end. *Sigh*

[Mark]

You made me smile! Thanks

[Kiari Sabon]

i liked it it was short and sweet if not bitter sweet

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I enjoyed this warm story within a story...the way you depict the storyteller himself, is an Enigma....
Well penned, dear Mark!

I enjoyed reading this piece..~xoxo~:)

[Mark]

Thank you Robbie. I was going for a sense of history of mankind... stories are common to all cultures across all ages.

[Brianna Brie]

Wow, this is a special write. The title is perfect as we all are writing our own stories. I especially like the message below:

Triumph, revenge,
forgiveness and yes, the crown jewel
of all....

Love.

Well written!

[Mark]

Thank you. I was thinking the common link between humans everywhere and all through history is Story.

[Jack...]

Very nicely done Mark. Sitting around a campfire listening...enjoyed this very much.

[Mark]

Thank you Jack

[Frieda P]

Nice story within your poem, that guy looks cranky though, are you sure it's not you? ;-) Enjoyed.

[Mark]

Haha that's my uncle. Thnx :)

[Leslie Philibert]

This is fine, it reminds me of a ballad, the start of a longer narrative poem..

[Mark]

Thank you Leslie.