Keep Me Cold

Hold in the rage

cold and blue

run into my core

Threatening to shard.

I feel no pain

there is no sun

only cold and blue

threatening to expand.

I lost my soul

such a long time ago

replaced by this ice

threatening your heat.

I will swallow up;

freeze the pain

I'll pierce this world

with my frozen rain.

I won't keep inside

any longer this 

dark blue rage

threatening to burst.

Where once love flowed

Now is crystal prison

cracked and bowed

I will coldly fission.

I let it go.                  

Author's Note

Reviews

[Megan]

This poem is deep. I like it. Coming from one who does not enjoy the cold, and lives in Alaska, I sometimes consider the cold to be an inspiration. Cheers. :)

[Jack...]

Gripping on a slippery surface at times becomes so very tedious and tiring. Letting go is sometimes the only option.

Very nice Mark.

[Mark]

Thanks Jack :)

[Ruth]

And so comes the release...the exhalation and then the rebirth...takes a while to reform and let the sun in again and this is powerfully spoken hon xox

[Mark]

Thank you Poppy !! :)

[Blue]

'I will swallow up;
freeze the pain
I'll pierce this world
with my frozen rain."

"Where once love flowed
Now is crystal prison
cracked and bowed
I will coldly fission."

Intense lines, Mark. I've watched the movie and it's really good. Your poem chilled me somehow. :)

[Mark]

I will have to try and warm you. Thanks for reading.

[Frieda P]

Lots of rough emotions come to light here. Tripped over 'threatening to shard'.

Nice if you can just let it go...

[Mark]

would shar'd work better? :P

[Frieda P]

Why didn't I think to add that!? Ha no not really it's still a noun ;-P

[s y e]

OMFG! MARK YOU'RE PLAYING MY ULTIMATE FAVOURITE SONG RIGHT NOW! DO YOU KNOW HOW PROUD MAMA IS OF YOU KNOW! THIS IS JUST PERFECTION AND SO IS YOUR POEM! THE SONG GOES BEAUTIFULLY.

I got over excited, sorry. Loved it dude!

[Mark]

I love that song too. Always chokes me up. Saw the movie twice. Glad you like it heehee

[Cody Williams]

A Great write Mark! Thanks for sharing it!

-CW

[Leslie Philibert]

What I enjoy here is the strong, extended metaphor, kept alive with poetic quality..

[Archangel Gabriel]

This Mark appears to be an expression of emptiness and the anger that builds when one feels unfulfilled and abandoned by life.