Win

I was listening to this song in one of the super bowl commercials and inspiration struck.

The way you feel when it's gone to hell.

Only thing left is an empty shell.

Missing all the life I will never show.

all for you but you can never know.

All the sins of the world

is the darkness I've unfurled

I know I lost my chance for the light

I'll hold darkness in with all my might.

It was a war I could never win.

stacked in cords of what has been.

I miss where the light used to show.

Where it disappeared I may never know.

I gave it up so you would be well.

you can never know how hard I fell.

I held this blackness away from you.

It's all I had; all I could do.

I'll smile inside at your precious light

I'll live with my friend, this awful night

I'll keep inside all that I've done.

For you are reminder that I have won.

Author's Note

Reviews

[paddy d daly]

some great lines in this one, a wonderful expression of selfless love and beautiful imagery too, great work.

[Mark]

Thanks Paddy

[Frieda P]

I can see the music's inspiration in this one....hindsight, you know what they say. It would have perfect if there were a few zephyrs. ;-)

[Mark]

Haha bite your tongue

[Blue]

"I gave it up so you would be well." That kind of love is hard to find these days.

[AYVID N]

Selfless love is hard to come by...

I was very touched by these lines...


"I gave it up so you would be well.

you can never know how hard I fell.

I'll held this blackness away from you.

It's all I had, and all I could do."



I hope the beloved sees the light one day and returns...

Flawless expression...

[Pryde Foltz]

'll smile inside at your precious light
I'll live with my friend, this awful night
I'll keep inside all that I've done.
For you are reminder that I have won.

Wonderful love poem with some great lyrical nuances. I really liked this one and would love to hear it to music.

(That is a hundred from me.)

[A. Amos]

It's all I had, and all I could do.
I'll smile inside at your precious light
I'll live with my friend, this awful night
I'll keep inside all that I've done.
For you are reminder that I have won.

Mark Very interesting and very positive poem. Congrats for creating such a great piece.