Predator
A Poem by
Mark
Feeling pain forms a wish to be the pain giver
Wings and eyes, weightless
I could defy the earth
conquer the sky.
Pitying the earth bound
hunting Earth's children
killing one and eating.
Flying I would be weightless
I would not know fear,
and would have no room
for a heart.
© 2014 Mark
Reviews
The last line is a tremendous ending
Posted 10 Years Ago
I thought of a hawk. Great poem Mark
Posted 10 Years Ago
I thought of a hawk. Great poem Mark
Mark this has a unique sadness to it. It describes the bird of prey in beautiful terms then slaughters it in that last line, describing survival without remorse.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Mark this has a unique sadness to it. It describes the bird of prey in beautiful terms then slaughters it in that last line, describing survival without remorse.
the heart, how central it is, biologically, and sentimentally, I like how you portray the thinking heart here cold and devoid of emotion
Posted 10 Years Ago
the heart, how central it is, biologically, and sentimentally, I like how you portray the thinking heart here cold and devoid of emotion
10 Years Ago
What can I say? I daydream. A lot. :p
OUCH!!
This is fierce... magnified by pain and anger... I hear the roar, and felt your bite!
Piercing write!!~xoxo~
Posted 10 Years Ago
OUCH!!
This is fierce... magnified by pain and anger... I hear the roar, and felt your bite!
Piercing write!!~xoxo~
10 Years Ago
To have pierced you makes my day (and possibly night) :)
Mark you have given many visions to this poem, written from depth of your concerns and read by heart. Congrats on such a creation, simply loved it.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Mark you have given many visions to this poem, written from depth of your concerns and read by heart. Congrats on such a creation, simply loved it.
A interesting poem. Easier to play the predator than the prey. Strong and direct words made your desired point in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
Posted 10 Years Ago
A interesting poem. Easier to play the predator than the prey. Strong and direct words made your desired point in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote
This is transcendental...a shift...brilliant! x
Posted 10 Years Ago
This is transcendental...a shift...brilliant! x
Flying I would be weightless
I would not know fear,
and would have no room
for a heart.
Bird of prey, indeed.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Flying I would be weightless
I would not know fear,
and would have no room
for a heart.
Bird of prey, indeed.
10 Years Ago
It's a good dream. :)
We can be that eagle...fearsome, formidable and deadly, if we can just learn to conquer ourself. A great thought!
Posted 10 Years Ago
We can be that eagle...fearsome, formidable and deadly, if we can just learn to conquer ourself. A great thought!
10 Years Ago
Yes, that is very true. Thank you for reading an commenting :)
10 Years Ago
You are welcome! :)
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Added on January 26, 2014
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Mark Dallas, TX
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I"m a gypsy born in New Hampshire, raised in Alaska, schooled in Washington, raised a family in California. Recently settled in Concord NH area. Where to next? I don't really have to think about it, i..
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